Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is my third weeks assignment for the MOOC i am in .. we had two choices and mine was to write a Pantoum. It also is supposed to address a cultural tradition with its meaning then and today

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a Pantoum
My Da wasn't much of a talking man;
he loved his stew and brew.
At table he told us a story
of how the Green holds true.
He loved his stew and brew but
harpooned his feeling free.
At table he told us a story or two
while bouncing me on his knee.
Harpooning his feeling free,
tears pierced his cheek that day.
While bouncing me on his knee;
he knew i would go away.
A tear pierced his cheek that day.
Diaspora paraded the streets.
He knew i would go away;
while cèilidhs of Dál Riata did meet
When diaspora paraded the ave
they forgot the bones and the teeth.
While cèilidhs of Dal Riata gathered
babies died in the streets.
They forgot the bones and the teeth.
At table he told a story or two.
Babies died in the streets.
It never was talked of, 'tis true

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
The Pantoum is made up of any number of quatrains. The second and fourth lines of preceding verses becomes the first and third line of the following verse. The last verse is a little different in that the first and third line are the second and fourth of the stanza above and the closing line is many times repeats the opening line.

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Einstein Noodle, this is an excellent pantoum. The subject (St. Patrick) is tremendously heart wrenching, but each verse of the poem enlightens the reader.

You are really good at formal poetry and I hope you continue. I loved your version of the pantoum.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Tamara Beryl Latham

4 Months Ago

Thanks Einstein. I'll try to post some different forms of classical poetry.

Decades .. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

that's a shame ... you must have gained some wonderful experience participating in such a way.
Tamara Beryl Latham

4 Months Ago

Yes, a little. Way too much work though. There was a classical poetry publication titled "The Form.. read more
What an amazing tale is told here and so darn adeptly too... I would never dare try anything so complex.. Peace, Love & All Good Things, plus a whole heap of respect.... N

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

oh Neville! it was a nightmare ...I can't tell you the write and re-writes ...every time I re-checke.. read more
Neville Pettitt

9 Months Ago

Ha' I can imagine the nightmare... always a pleasure tho when I visit your pages here......Neville
Powerful use of this format

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

it was no easy breezy Cherrie :} i can't tell you how many re-writes i went through and still am not.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

1 Year Ago

I get it, it is very hard to be happy with a set gh low like this one, but you hit it dead-on.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Cherrie :)
You certainly nailed the form but with another amazing slice of history served up raw. Kudos!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

John...this form was so confusing to me..i was sure my dementia was triggering ;} ..it was worked an.. read more
Great write Einstein.
Those words from parents must have left haunting memories. Sad that even today, those same words are spoken in many languages to children.


Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes indeed, Paul .. our children do leave at some point in time .. and if heritage is not taught it .. read more
A tear pierced his cheek that day.
Diaspora paraded the streets.
He knew i would go away;

a touching story and nicely done E... you do put lot of effort into your assignments... and must appreciate your patience for learning new things..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh this was not an easy one its true ...and i re-worked it over and over trying to get it a bit bett.. read more
So richly painted in a dark, full language of the mystic colors. The voice seems to resonate over time, over endless passages of life and everlasting lives found on every stone. There is a novel found in your letters and lines.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

Ar scáth a chéile a mhaireann na daoine. ;)
An owl on the moon

1 Year Ago

D'fhéadfadh siad go léir a athrú i bhfianaise. :)
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) yes indeed ..its the light that holds life for sure
I liked this very much.. I had to google to find out what cèilidhs of Dal Riata meant.. my Grandmother was the last of the American Scotts that spoke Gaelic.. sad loss that.. both the language and my Gram.. thank you for giving me a reason to look.. and learn a bit more about my roots..

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh my goodness olla! i would love to know more of your Gram .. and loss .. yes what loss for sure .... read more
olla

1 Year Ago

I didn't know my Gram very well.. I was a child when she passed.. but the mystery of who she was dro.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) ................
The Pantoum, what a complicated format. But I
It is true.. many stories are passed on,but often the 'bad' things are ignored and just not talked of. Well written, Einstein.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Auntie .. our next assignment was to take the pantoum and "explode it" minimize it and yet re.. read more
What a poetic feat of words and rhyme! The subject matter rich with history. Your tribute to your father is honest and heart-felt. "The diaspora", we see the babies dying in the street- we hear the things not said...Magnificent Master-Class work E.!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

you are too kind Annette ..and very encouraging :) thank you so much for taking time and reviewing ... read more

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