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A Poem by Rachel Anderson
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You know that feeling when everything seems to be falling apart and you feel so helpless and weak? Me too. But this poem is about the moment that you overcome it all.

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Please keep your distance from me;
I have to learn how to breathe on my own.
Time pulls in closer to home
With its icy, cold fingers around my throat.

Terrified, losing sight
Of everything I am and I
Feel the pain enter my soul.
It's threatening, taunting me!
"Open up your arms and see!
Remember your frostbitten heart."

But now you're pushing me
Pushing me over the edge.
Falling now, fading out,
Love never lasting,
Walls closing in on me.

But I am done!
I'm hurling myself in the fire,
Quenching my thirst for anger inside.

I have won!
I'm throwing it all far away,
Letting Pride dig its own grave,
Walking away.

© 2013 Rachel Anderson



Author's Note

Rachel Anderson
Originally a song. I can't hear it in my head without the melody, so I hope you guys can tell me if it sounds alright. :)

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Sometimes we stick with things or relationships because of our own stubborn pride. It's claustrophobic and cloying. We often have to make a conscious decision to throw off the mantle of oppression and move in another direction. You write of that with a clear path in mind and it works.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much. I'm glad you think so. :)



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I think it sounds great, the end is a bit awkward, but otherwise, its awesome!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Is it? The last two stanzas are actually the chorus to the song, so I wasn't sure where I wanted to .. read more
You gotta pick a key and some chords. Throw in an F on the chorus. I love that chord.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

I already have the piano part to it. It doesn't have an F chord. That's the wrong key. But it sounds.. read more
Nice stuff...loved it :-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks!
ah good

Posted 4 Years Ago


a good one!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you. :)
Sometimes we stick with things or relationships because of our own stubborn pride. It's claustrophobic and cloying. We often have to make a conscious decision to throw off the mantle of oppression and move in another direction. You write of that with a clear path in mind and it works.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much. I'm glad you think so. :)
feeling smothered, this is what i glean from this resonant piece. letting go and giving in to pride, tough nut to crack. what's that old saying, pride goeth before a fall? depends on how far you're willing to fall, i guess. well met and nicely penned...there's a song in there for sure, yep!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

In this piece, pride doesn't fall. I push it. Lol! Thanks so much!
quinfinn

4 Years Ago

always welcome....

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Tags: done, overcome, depression, pain, sadness, poem, falling, falling apart, soul, helpless, weak, strong, fear, fearless, strength, fire, ice, inspirational, thirst, pride, heart, hurt, love, death

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Rachel Anderson
Rachel Anderson

Morganton, GA



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Note: All thumbnails are my own photos unless told otherwise in the Author's note. Thank you. My name is Rachel. I'm a sophomore in college studying communication sciences and disorders. I love wri.. more..

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