Secrets

Secrets

A Poem by Rachel Anderson
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We hold our secrets so closely to us; It's the thought of them being revealed that is truly destructive.

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I wish to disappear.
Will you do that for me, World?
Will you swallow me whole?
My fingers tightly curled
Around what I must release.

My fist hides my secret
From everyone except me,
But despite my best efforts
To keep it all inside,
It seeps through the cracks
Of my knuckles here and I,

While sobbing and pleading,
Watch it tear through my skin.
The tears silently roll
Down my cheeks and chin.

I inhale the faceless people
Judging me for simply being;
They look me up and down,
Looking but never seeing.

This world brainwashes its victims
Like a tauntingly cruel Siren:
"To first give up your soul
Is the only way to be free."

© 2013 Rachel Anderson



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I wish to disappear.
Will you do that for me, World?

Will you swallow me whole?

My fingers tightly curled

Around what I must release

I really enjoyed especially this stanza. I loved the whole poem. But I vividly recall the amount of time this I have felt this way. This piece just sums up a lot of emotions that are difficult to describe. I also really loved the language that you used in this piece. Its so captivating.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

2 Years Ago

I'm so glad you liked it!



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I wish to disappear.
Will you do that for me, World?

Will you swallow me whole?

My fingers tightly curled

Around what I must release

I really enjoyed especially this stanza. I loved the whole poem. But I vividly recall the amount of time this I have felt this way. This piece just sums up a lot of emotions that are difficult to describe. I also really loved the language that you used in this piece. Its so captivating.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

2 Years Ago

I'm so glad you liked it!
I love your writing! It's layered with emotions hidden beneath a subtle play on the words. Intriguing and a thoroughly enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

I'm glad you read that far into it. :)
yep, that's good writing Rachel, I'm glad you've chosen to share it

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
Really I appreciate your writing...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
Lois Seay

3 Years Ago

Welcome..can you inform me how can I get all of your poem collections?
Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

I don't publish or anything if that's what you're asking. I just like putting them on here.
I hate watching someone as beautiful as you feel "Cry" ...
The theme's very diplomatic but the words're realistic .. You shown me a short film through the whole poem. Nicely written. Keep on!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

Yeah, it's just a nice outlet when I'm feeling down.
Neon

3 Years Ago

Yeah.. writing's one of the best thing that keeps us in a touch of life and tells us how to move or .. read more
Rachel Anderson

3 Years Ago

I intend to! Haha :)
It does make you ponder about the truth will set you free. They become an anchor as they grow and multiply and we can drown beneath its weight. This is really well written and I think the message is one that many can relate to. Well done Rachel.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much! :)
Fantastic. I liked the fourth stanza:

"I inhale the faceless people
Judging me for simply being;
They look me up and down,
Looking but never seeing."

Good job! I can very much relate to this poem, and I'm sure many others can as well.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing, Aisha! :)
I'm glad I stumbled upon this great poem...Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thanks for reading!
Sami Khalil

4 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)
I've felt like this before, and I know that is a pretty crappy place to be. And I do agree with what your writers note said at the top. Fearing what we want to keep from others causes us to do things that prevent our growth. You know, things that put obstacles in the path of understanding the world. More than that though, it makes us feel uncomfortable around people, as you describe in the second to last stanza: "I inhale the faceless people/Judging me for simply being;" I think those are a strong pair of lines that people can really relate to.

As for the last stanza. I think people brainwash other people into thinking that to see your soul is the only true way to be free. Although, I do like the idea because I can think of lots of settings where that is true of people. Like big shopping malls or county fairs.

At any rate, I did like this piece and I am glad I stopped by to read it. Thank you for sharing, Rachel.


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Wow, thank you so much for taking the time to review!
Clockwork

4 Years Ago

You're welcome
This poem is captivating. The descriptions you use are intriguing and well thought out. Reading this poem, I could feel the emotions this poem creates. The emotions are strong and relatable. The poem itself is so simple, yet at the same time is so complex. Very well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

4 Years Ago

Thank you! What a great description of my writing. It's can be so simple, but there's so much meanin.. read more

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Added on June 12, 2013
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Tags: secret, fist, hide, love, hate, depression, cry, tear, sad, judge, taunting, ghost, banshee, myth, legend, mythology, disappear, world, problems, sob, weep, plead, relationship, turmoil, argue, self

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Rachel Anderson
Rachel Anderson

Morganton, GA



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Note: All thumbnails are my own photos unless told otherwise in the Author's note. Thank you. My name is Rachel. I'm a sophomore in college studying communication sciences and disorders. I love wri.. more..

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