Midnight Train

In the solace of eve,

She tries to leave-

To break away from these confined walls

Hindering her,

Causing her to stall.

 

She has to break free,

From this line of imprisonment

Surrounding her,

Blocking the view of her dreams.

 

So she runs toward the light,

In tiptoes,

The breeze blowing in her hair;

Trying to catch the midnight train,

To take her somewhere.

 

She runs past the gates,

Through the walls,

Continuing her newfound fate.

 

On the midnight train,

Nothing is ever too late.

Reviews

[deeps]

This is so wonderful I enjoyed this write.

[PaperHearts]

An amazing write! It was so honest, and so evocative, and I really felt like I connected with the character in this piece. This was an expressive, beautifully written poem. I enjoyed reading it. :)
~PaperHearts

[Jai]

This is my favorite among your masterpieces. :) I love it! Although there are tinges of sadness, the piece ends positively. Gives people who read it hope. :)

[Soul Magic✯]

you flow so wonderfully in this piece... great visuals. i enjoyed the read. *smiles*

[AbsentElements]

I love that it rhymes, it helps the flow. This is a very nice write.

[MusicJunkie66]

I loved the flow, it was awesome! :]

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Hi Rach. What I like about this poem is the narration. The storyteller seems to be an omniscient persona watching over the subject of the poem. This highlights a fantastic perception of a 'fictional' as told by a 'real'. However how real is the midnight train? My take is that like a subject of a story, such escapism is merely fictional driving home the point that the subject of the poem is in a hopeless position--seeking refuge on something non-real.

Good take on the critique of how most people actually solve problems. Perhaps escapism is not the answer for her, rather reality? She must take then the morning train, if you get what i hypothesize. :)

Good poem Rach. Enjoyed it very much!

[Manda]

wow this was really good. i could feel the emotion and suspense in this poem! the detail was very good too! it brought me into the eyes of the character. the flow and grammar was also very good too! i dont know why but when i read about this i thought of Anne Frank and the concentration camps. it just felt like the way you described this made me think that. WELL DONE! 100/100

[~*_Michelle_*~]

Fellow Filipino...Amazing. I had some weird imagrey in this:) I considered this to be about running away from the pain. And trying to leave it behind, by being whisked away..:) Nice