Pepsi

Dominating nations
Entertaining the boring
Energizing the sick
Taste which jumps and fizzes within your mouth .

Open the can with glee
Letting the gas go free
Drink. Swallow. BURP!
Shocking to see the weight scale
Bought new jeans in Macy's ,

FAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIlLLLlLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviews

[Chris]

Commercials tell such expressive tales! And all the rocking vids! and rhythms - models and energy!
And the scale ...has to be lying, HAS TO! and-yet-nothing-fits-right.

Well spoken, good tones ...perfect choice of final line.

One note though - you caught an "I" in the stream of "L"s.

[Saddam]

ha!!! this is a diffrent poetry.

Open the can with glee
Letting the gas go free
Drink. Swallow. BURP!

I like this lines.

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

interesting poem, I see how You took a delightful poke at commercialism. Excellent Job! i think I want a Pepsi now. lol

[The Nude Writer]

Oh no! Darn that Pepsi! Delightful poem :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Ha!! This is a hilarious and rewarding criticism of consumerist culture. It reminds me of the "Fizzy Lifting Drinks" in the original Charlie and the Chocolate Factory movie. My favorite part is the hyperbole of the line, "energizing the sick!" It may be true that many mothers give their children soft drinks to help upset stomachs when they are ill, but this kind of ridiculous claim is also what makes advertising so consistently ludicrous!! I always try to give actually constructive criticism, so if you want any suggestions I will just say that I think you could actually ramp up the ridiculousness a little. Tongue in cheek style, so that it is obvious you are being ridiculous but you are not letting it on...You already have done that, clearly, but I think it could be even more satirical. There are so many ridiculous claims to draw from in advertising. Well done though, great way to make a mockery of the psychological trickery of advertisers!!

[Julie Spade]

Thank You , Robby! I appreciate your comment! I will utilize your advice for my future poems. :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Well, I am most humbly complimented. I hope we can keep up the mutual review. I think just now I am not in my top shape for reviewing, but I wanted to give you my considered opinion all the same, despite it being a bit unipygic at the moment.

[Rasi Rana]

Really nice poem, n thanks to bro Robby Tusitala, who reviewed this poem and it posted on my wall) :) You challanged the Ad in a very clever way, you trapped them in their own net.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Hi there, bro! I didn't even know I had that power, but I am glad to share the poems I find worthwhile! She's a good writer, ain't she? -Trapped them in their own net, exactly!! I like that!

[Rasi Rana]

Yeah she is!!)) n keep sharing, that's why we are here. Spread the Light :)

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I will shine a spotlight on whatever I find this worthy! Thanks, bud!