Entrance in My Life

Entrance in My Life

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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The poem is based on poet's love whom he always wishes from God and at last his wish is granted.

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In the deserted lonely square,
In which the sad sand smear;
I was waiting for a saviour,
who would be my carrier.

My thirst of love was too severe,
That I want one to quench it mere.
And our Lord, the God; heard my wish
and granted it, which was too astonish.

Adorable and Admirable, Honest and Amiable
Decent, Kind and altogether Lovable.
And what qualities shall I reveal
as there are none to conceal.

Forlorn and Feeble was I,
and was taking a deep sigh.
But now there's delight and joy
with my love I will enjoy.

Far worse I had lived,
and for many things deprived.
But now I will love you my dear,
and I will get rid of fear.



© 2017 Raj Sahu



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“Forlorn and Feeble was I,
and was taking a deep sigh.
But now there's delight and joy
with my love I will enjoy."

When there is a first contact with our love, the person is so elated and wishes that the love should remain forever with him.
Now, about your work, the image you paste is very beautiful and the vivid description of the love, saviour, God keeps me reading the entire poem. How was your suffering and how you rejoiced after his entrance is worth noting. Looking for more of your works.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate your review.



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Again thanks for this beautiful read and poetry
thanks for entry into another of my weekly competitions i like this a lot i wish you well

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you.
Juliespenhere

3 Months Ago

as i said to another contestant 86 to judge and comment on its very hard there are no losers here if.. read more
Thanks for entering my competition love this beautiful

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you!
Congratulations on your 1st place, Raj!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you dear.
You writes love poetry quite well dear!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you!
May you carry this happiness all through your life. Poem is well penned.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you!
Love..beautiful words..er..nice..

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you.
“Forlorn and Feeble was I,
and was taking a deep sigh.
But now there's delight and joy
with my love I will enjoy."

When there is a first contact with our love, the person is so elated and wishes that the love should remain forever with him.
Now, about your work, the image you paste is very beautiful and the vivid description of the love, saviour, God keeps me reading the entire poem. How was your suffering and how you rejoiced after his entrance is worth noting. Looking for more of your works.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much. I appreciate your review.
It is a very nice feeling when one's love enter in his/her life..you are just on the seventh heaven..you depicted the same feelings through this work..keep writing

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thanks a lot!
It is very interesting to note that when you found your love you are free from fear. Love is such a vast concept that we mortals know only a minuscule about it. Thank you.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Raj Sahu

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
As always, thank you for entering your work into my competition.

You evoke a lot of feelings within a short piece and it seems very well thought out. I can see that you worked very hard on this.

I always think this whenever I read your pieces, that for a young man of only 16 years old you speak upon topics with such wisdom already.

I liked these two lines in particular:

But now there's delight and joy
with my love I will enjoy.

Well done

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

9 Months Ago

Thanks a lot!

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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Hello everyone. Myself Raj Sahu, a 17-year-old boy who is a servant of the God until his last breath. I write poems and thinks that in future I will try other writings too. I also love reading. My fav.. more..

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