Entrance in My Life

The poem is based on poet's love whom he always wishes from God and at last his wish is granted.

In the deserted lonely square,

In which the sad sand smear;

I was waiting for a saviour,

who would be my carrier.

My thirst of love was too severe,

That I want one to quench it mere.

And our Lord, the God; heard my wish

and granted it, which was too astonish.

Adorable and Admirable, Honest and Amiable

Decent, Kind and altogether Lovable.

And what qualities shall I reveal

as there are none to conceal.

Forlorn and Feeble was I,

and was taking a deep sigh.

But now there's delight and joy

with my love I will enjoy.

Far worse I had lived,

and for many things deprived.

But now I will love you my dear,

and I will get rid of fear.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems

Reviews

[Lara Crimson]

“Forlorn and Feeble was I,
and was taking a deep sigh.
But now there's delight and joy
with my love I will enjoy."

When there is a first contact with our love, the person is so elated and wishes that the love should remain forever with him.
Now, about your work, the image you paste is very beautiful and the vivid description of the love, saviour, God keeps me reading the entire poem. How was your suffering and how you rejoiced after his entrance is worth noting. Looking for more of your works.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. I appreciate your review.

[Najam Us Saher]

I really liked the flow and rhythm of this poem. Very well written.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[Zephyr]

Loved your poem....
I can relate. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme.
Keep writing......

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you for your appreciation.

[Zephyr]

My pleasure......

[Surya]

HAAN, that was beautiful...I liked it...

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear Surya.

[Surya]

you're welcome..:)

[alankillsmonsters]

Even though i am an atheist i liked it.
I am not a good reviewer, my words are limited.
I can only appreciate your creation, i cant point out flaws, imperfection is perfection because its raw.
I liked it

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you for your appreciation.