War: A Threat to Humanity

War: A Threat to Humanity

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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This poems narrates a story and conveys a message to the people against war.

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There was a kind man,
Soft and noble his soul was!
Before his eyes was a clear goal,
To recruit in army for a particular cause.

He wished to experience the scene,
The scene of the massive war!
So excited he was from the first day,
As the bitter reality was too far.

The day arrived with a bright sky,
Brighter was the man's curiosity.
He got ready with full of zeal,
Unaware of the war's brutality.

Standing steady at the frontier,
Holding his sword like a thunder bolt!
Both armies broke down at once
And suddenly the man came to a halt.

The bright sky puffed into cloud,
A cloud full of groaning dust.
Recklessly the bodies were falling down
And the war tragedy was at must.

 Bloody, bloody the battlefield was,
Filled with innumerable heads.
Screams and shrieks were just common
But there were none from death beds.

On a courageous path, the soldiers followed,
Each carrying a brave brave heart.
But on looking at the massacre scene,
The kind man astonished on his part.

Slowly, slowly the man comprehend
The cruelty of the massive war.
He bent on his knees at the once
And threw his sword very far.

He raised his eyes to heaven,
And cried in a very loud voice;
"Is this the humanity, my Lord?"
A sudden silence spread over noise.

At horizon a beautiful bird crossed,
The beautiful bird came out as a Dove.
Carrying the serenity over her wings,
Along with the message of peace and love.

The bloody sky lost down its lust
And a whiteness smeared all around.
The Dove seems like a messenger of God;
Sent down when he heard the cry and sound.

With her long and charming wings,
She covered the entire field.
The kind man was fully surprised
As a soldier gets his protective shield.

In a moment of vision, the field vanished,
A Dreamworld took its place.
The Dove took the kind man there
And there was a comfort on his face.

The Dove quoth to the man,
"Be kind, be peaceful or unless you will fall,
For God has made you people 
To praise him and love all."

The kind man understood the very message,
He swore to practice peace and harmony.
To walk long and preach all these,
Became his life-long ceremony.
 

© 2017 Raj Sahu



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Critique: (To recruit in army for a particular cause.) an army - The word "in" doesn’t fit this context
(A sudden silence spread over noise) Having silence over noise is a contradiction and a context issue, might I suggest "A sudden silence spread suppressing the noise" ?
(At horizon a beautiful bird crossed) At the horizon, - identifying word needed


Review: The true power of faith is not the moving of mountains but the swaying of heart and dark intent they may hold. Well done my friend an inspirational and moving poem Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!




Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thanks a lot dear Bear. 😊



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This was SOOOO AWESOME!!GREATWORK!!!!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks a lot dear!
I always wanted to convey a story through poetry. I like your way of writing on this one. Write more. :)

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you very much.
Strong message.... Loved it.... Thanks for sharing....

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you. 😊
A strong and meaningful message, great work!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you. 😊
War, what is it good for?

You're message is very strong and straight forward.

Thank you for sharing :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you. 😊
Joey Nizz

2 Months Ago

Your welcome :)
Good one. Realistic and straight as an arrow.


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you.😊
beyond the words you speak about humanity and left very nice quote at end of poem
"Be kind, be peaceful or unless you will fall,
For God has made you people
To praise him and love all."

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you very much dear. 😊
This is a very amusing Poem Raj!
The message you carry along with your descriptive style is quite good!
Thank you very much for sharing this.
I absolutely loved this!


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thanks a lot dear. 😊
Neetha

2 Months Ago

Pleasure...:)
Since I've hated war all my life, I was drawn to read your poem. I find it to be very original, the way you tell it like a story, a parable that contains a lesson, & good use of metaphors that suggest war & peace, like the dove. In the first stanza, it seems weird to stay so general about the reason war had to be fought. It might be a little stronger if this was more specific. People don't just stroll into war like it's a good idea. I think you need to be more convincing about why this guy was determined to go out to make war. Then the realization of what he got himself into would be more powerful, I think. I like the way you slip from reality to fantasy, mixing hardcore scenes with gentle symbolic imagery. I always love a good story with a compelling lesson.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much. 😊
This is so good! The rhyming scheme and the emotions, everything is just so beautiful and amazing. This is so damn good! This is called talent, you just made me feel so much, with your words. Keep writing!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Months Ago

Thanks a lot dear. 😊
Anjali

2 Months Ago

No problem!😀😀

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Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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