The Teacher

The Teacher

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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This poem emphasizes on the features of a teacher.

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An individual tries with numerous cries,
To make their future better.
But they make out the mockery,
With gibberish talk and clatter.

He is that patient wick who was never sick,
Of being burned for other's sake.
'The frugal time will always flit'
Such teachings and statements he always make.

With many sights, various lives he lights,
An amicable and pleasant character.
He, who always follow impartiality,
Uplift the child in every sector.

I really bow before such a creature.
He is none other than a teacher.

© 2018 Raj Sahu



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I suggest you use smaller words and it would be better of every at least other sentence would rhyme. Try and go something like this:

He tries with a lot of cries,
for their better coming ahead lies,
but they mock and talk,
and in clatter they flock.


Posted 11 Months Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

11 Months Ago

Thanks for your suggestions.
Wild Rose

4 Months Ago

NO > I like gibberish talk and clatter
Just cut out 'with numerous cries'

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Deborah Leah Krempa

3 Months Ago

Instead say that this is a beautiful write. Thanking you for sharing



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I really enjoyed the story of a teacher. And how such a story is told. Very eloquent with such descriptive wordage.

Way to go! Explain it the best way you want and the only way you can!
Thanks for sharing,

Tara

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Raj Sahu

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much.
Tara Marie

3 Weeks Ago

You're most welcome
Nice work i look forward to reading more :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you.
Your though is nice but, It's little hard to understand. You used some words that I heard first time. Otherwise, your poem was really good.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

It's good. It will increase your vocabulary. Thank you.
Akki

3 Months Ago

hahaha... oh, thanks!
I really like this. He is the the patient wick line, that is something I can relate to. I would have loved to have a teached like this. Nicely done sir.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much 😊
Nice poem describing teachers

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you.
Small edits. “another’s” “follows” “uplifts”

Not a fan of “cries” in the first line, though. Any alternatives?

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

I think ‘cries' is the best word here. It denotes both- a shout and a pain.(while teaching the rog.. read more
very nice write... sublime ending too!!!

enjoyed

recherche

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you.
We are lucky to find a teacher who inspires us. I had a great teacher in high school. She was my mentor. I would have never graduated without her. Nicely written. I sure wouldn't want to be a teacher in a classroom full of rowdy kids who don't care what I have to say.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much.
This reminds me of the tortoise and the hare, how the slowest wins the race. The generation now, which I am in, is a now generation. We have grown up with the internet and expect everything ASAP. This shows that those who are patient don't burn out as quickly, sorry for the pun lol. Great job!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

LOL! Thank you for your review.
Great wording but like a previous comment said, smaller words in this case would push your meaning so much farther. I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing a piece of your mind.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

3 Months Ago

Thank you.

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Added on September 1, 2017
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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Hello everyone. Myself Raj Sahu, a 17-year-old boy who is a servant of the God until his last breath. I write poems and thinks that in future I will try other writings too. I also love reading. My fav.. more..

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