The Teacher

The Teacher

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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This poem emphasizes on the features of a teacher.

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An individual tries with numerous cries,
To make their future better.
But they make out the mockery,
With gibberish talk and clatter.

He is that patient wick who was never sick,
Of being burned for other's sake.
'The frugal time will always flit'
Such teachings and statements he always make.

With many sights, various lives he lights,
An amicable and pleasant character.
He, who always follow impartiality,
Uplift the child in every sector.

I really bow before such a creature.
He is none other than a teacher.

© 2018 Raj Sahu



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I suggest you use smaller words and it would be better of every at least other sentence would rhyme. Try and go something like this:

He tries with a lot of cries,
for their better coming ahead lies,
but they mock and talk,
and in clatter they flock.


Posted 8 Months Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

8 Months Ago

Thanks for your suggestions.
Wild Rose

1 Month Ago

NO > I like gibberish talk and clatter
Just cut out 'with numerous cries'

Tha.. read more
Deborah Leah Krempa

2 Weeks Ago

Instead say that this is a beautiful write. Thanking you for sharing



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Nice work i look forward to reading more :)

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Days Ago

Thank you.
Your though is nice but, It's little hard to understand. You used some words that I heard first time. Otherwise, your poem was really good.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Raj Sahu

1 Week Ago

It's good. It will increase your vocabulary. Thank you.
Akki

1 Week Ago

hahaha... oh, thanks!
I really like this. He is the the patient wick line, that is something I can relate to. I would have loved to have a teached like this. Nicely done sir.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much 😊
Nice poem describing teachers

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you.
Small edits. “another’s” “follows” “uplifts”

Not a fan of “cries” in the first line, though. Any alternatives?

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

I think ‘cries' is the best word here. It denotes both- a shout and a pain.(while teaching the rog.. read more
very nice write... sublime ending too!!!

enjoyed

recherche

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you.
We are lucky to find a teacher who inspires us. I had a great teacher in high school. She was my mentor. I would have never graduated without her. Nicely written. I sure wouldn't want to be a teacher in a classroom full of rowdy kids who don't care what I have to say.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much.
This reminds me of the tortoise and the hare, how the slowest wins the race. The generation now, which I am in, is a now generation. We have grown up with the internet and expect everything ASAP. This shows that those who are patient don't burn out as quickly, sorry for the pun lol. Great job!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

LOL! Thank you for your review.
Great wording but like a previous comment said, smaller words in this case would push your meaning so much farther. I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing a piece of your mind.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you.
A profound and endearing way to pay homage towards our educators who by today's standards rarely get the credit they truly deserve for empowering and inspiring there students towards better futures. Great work Raj Sahu. A powerful and positive message every teacher should read. :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you from the core if my heart.

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Added on September 1, 2017
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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Hello everyone. Myself Raj Sahu, a 17-year-old boy who is a servant of the God until his last breath. I write poems and thinks that in future I will try other writings too. I also love reading. My fav.. more..

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