OBITUARY

OBITUARY

A Poem by J. Marc
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An epigram by F. Schiller translated by J.M. Rakotolahy

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OBITUARY

 

Do you enjoy your life

O! Passerby?

Then, this rejoices me

For I have also lived

I have also enjoyed life.


© 2008 J. Marc



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J. Marc
any suggestion of improvement welcome

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It seems to me that translation is a tricky business. . . you can't think in exactly the same way through two different languages. That said, a different punctuation scheme might highlight the natural pauses.

Do you enjoy your life,

O, Passerby?

Then, this rejoices me

For I have also lived.

I have also enjoyed life.

And, then, I may not know anything at all.


Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Reminds me of Frost. Short simple and well versed. Kind of a nod to how busy we get. It's like a hello/goodbye type feeling.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully unique....the words we all are lefft with at the end have an aura of their own and die with us.....this is stunning love! xx

Posted 6 Years Ago


I prefer people to use their own English because then the reviewer finds charm in language, but, as you've asked, I suggest the following:

Oh, Passerby,
Do you enjoy your life?
If answering yes, then,
Rejoices me
For I have also lived
To reap the same ..

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nothing to change here. I like the oddity of some of the phrases. Makes it more colorful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not a bad start I would finish it because it seems this piece need an end not to life but to this write. Good work

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its a simple and - what I would call - soft light-hearted piece with a heavy message for those who pay attention to it.
I believe Emily's suggestion regarding punctuation does makes sense. All the best and keep up the good work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I would not change a word, each day s one to rejoice life smiles hugs I love your writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't think you could add to or change this gem much. It is light on a heavy subject, something I am a big fan of. Great verse!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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