If I Die Before Time

If I Die Before Time

A Poem by Rashi Jain
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If I did, just Don't cry.

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If I die before time,
just wrap me in your arms and smile.
Don't cry when you see me lying cold,
For I’ll be up in a warmer place,
Replying.
Just remember all the good times we had,
and when we laid moments to remember.

If I ever leave you before the time I promised,
just take my ashened hand and feel my helplessness.
And take my gratitude for building a rainbow above my coffin,
I will see it all time, the colours you have added to my life.

If I ever lay motionless in front of you,
just remember my presence and smile.
And don't cry when you see me lying cold.
For I'll be up in a warmer place, fine.

© 2017 Rashi Jain



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Rashi Jain
This Seventeen Year Old poet awaits your feedback. ❤💕

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So a question. Assume you're in love with someone and they die. Forgetting the grief, would you wrap a dead body in your arms and smile, or be repelled? You're thinking of symbolic actions and postures assumed for dramatic purpose.

And assuming that there is an afterlife, would you really want to go to "the warmer place?" 😁

You need to differentiate between writing to which YOU bring emotion and that which BRINGS emotion. In this, as you read, you place yourself into the proper mood and emote the feeling. But when we give our words to others, knowledge of HOW we want them to read, and our intent for the reader's emotional response it isn't included because the images and setting that's called up by the words only exists in our mind. Intent doesn't make it to the page. So the words, instead of pushing your buttons must evoke a reader's emotions by making a given reader live the situation. It's very like the question of viewpoint in fiction. The article I link to below isn't meant for poets, but it does apply, because the mood you set in the readers' mind matters a great deal to how THEY perceive the situation—what they bring to the words.
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/2011/09/22/the-grumpy-writing-coach-8/

For a good overview of poetic writing, take a look at the excerpt, on Amazon, for Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. It's worth reading for what it says about the structure of language and the power poetry has to evoke emotion.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

4 Months Ago

The poem is not based on after life. It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referre.. read more
JayG

4 Months Ago

• It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referred to as warmer place'.
read more



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excellence of assumption you made of die and giving an thoughtful message to us
thanks for sharing

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

4 Months Ago

Thank-you so much❤
i wish it was bit longer because i really enjoyed it...just too good...keep up the good work....

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

4 Months Ago

Thankyou💕
So a question. Assume you're in love with someone and they die. Forgetting the grief, would you wrap a dead body in your arms and smile, or be repelled? You're thinking of symbolic actions and postures assumed for dramatic purpose.

And assuming that there is an afterlife, would you really want to go to "the warmer place?" 😁

You need to differentiate between writing to which YOU bring emotion and that which BRINGS emotion. In this, as you read, you place yourself into the proper mood and emote the feeling. But when we give our words to others, knowledge of HOW we want them to read, and our intent for the reader's emotional response it isn't included because the images and setting that's called up by the words only exists in our mind. Intent doesn't make it to the page. So the words, instead of pushing your buttons must evoke a reader's emotions by making a given reader live the situation. It's very like the question of viewpoint in fiction. The article I link to below isn't meant for poets, but it does apply, because the mood you set in the readers' mind matters a great deal to how THEY perceive the situation—what they bring to the words.
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/2011/09/22/the-grumpy-writing-coach-8/

For a good overview of poetic writing, take a look at the excerpt, on Amazon, for Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. It's worth reading for what it says about the structure of language and the power poetry has to evoke emotion.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

4 Months Ago

The poem is not based on after life. It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referre.. read more
JayG

4 Months Ago

• It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referred to as warmer place'.
read more
We will live forever through the works we did.
Who ever afraid of death ,not really afraid. they afraid of the leaving their beloved ones back there, their emotions etc.

you explained it beautifully.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

4 Months Ago

Thank-you❤💕

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