If I Die Before Time

If I Die Before Time

A Poem by Rashi Jain
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If I did, just Don't cry.

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If I die before time,
just wrap me in your arms and smile.
Don't cry when you see me lying cold,
For I’ll be up in a warmer place,
Replying.
Just remember all the good times we had,
and when we laid moments to remember.

If I ever leave you before the time I promised,
just take my ashened hand and feel my helplessness.
And take my gratitude for building a rainbow above my coffin,
I will see it all time, the colours you have added to my life.

If I ever lay motionless in front of you,
just remember my presence and smile.
And don't cry when you see me lying cold.
For I'll be up in a warmer place, fine.

© 2017 Rashi Jain



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Rashi Jain
This Seventeen Year Old poet awaits your feedback. ❤💕

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It was just so sweet...I loved every single line of it..this is the best poem that I had read so far here...You are the best poet of all the poets here when it comes to writing poems of love...This poem just made me cry..The flow that your poem has , very few poets have it in their poems...You are becoming my favourite poem with your every poem that I am reading...This poem is indeed worth appreciating and the title suits best for it..everything in the poem just seemed perfect for me right from the title to the entire content...
Well done...

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Months Ago

Thank-you so much ❤ the best comment I received today❤



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It was just so sweet...I loved every single line of it..this is the best poem that I had read so far here...You are the best poet of all the poets here when it comes to writing poems of love...This poem just made me cry..The flow that your poem has , very few poets have it in their poems...You are becoming my favourite poem with your every poem that I am reading...This poem is indeed worth appreciating and the title suits best for it..everything in the poem just seemed perfect for me right from the title to the entire content...
Well done...

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Months Ago

Thank-you so much ❤ the best comment I received today❤
And take my gratitude for building a rainbow above my coffin,
I will see it all time, the colours you have added to my life.

mmm this one made me cry... its beautiful... how we don't wish for our loved ones to be sad...just to be happy for the time we shared...
and love that above lines...


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Months Ago

Thankyou so much
It's a master piece from the title you chose and the way you expressed such deep emotions about the reality of life . In the end it's the love and memories that will remain forever

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Months Ago

Thankyou so much
Shivalik Kalsotra

2 Months Ago

most welcome
Maybe in death, a warmer place. We do hope dear Rashi. Nice flow of thoughts left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

2 Months Ago

Thankyou so much ❤
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

You are welcome Rashi.
excellence of assumption you made of die and giving an thoughtful message to us
thanks for sharing

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

1 Year Ago

Thank-you so much❤
i wish it was bit longer because i really enjoyed it...just too good...keep up the good work....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

1 Year Ago

Thankyou💕
So a question. Assume you're in love with someone and they die. Forgetting the grief, would you wrap a dead body in your arms and smile, or be repelled? You're thinking of symbolic actions and postures assumed for dramatic purpose.

And assuming that there is an afterlife, would you really want to go to "the warmer place?" 😁

You need to differentiate between writing to which YOU bring emotion and that which BRINGS emotion. In this, as you read, you place yourself into the proper mood and emote the feeling. But when we give our words to others, knowledge of HOW we want them to read, and our intent for the reader's emotional response it isn't included because the images and setting that's called up by the words only exists in our mind. Intent doesn't make it to the page. So the words, instead of pushing your buttons must evoke a reader's emotions by making a given reader live the situation. It's very like the question of viewpoint in fiction. The article I link to below isn't meant for poets, but it does apply, because the mood you set in the readers' mind matters a great deal to how THEY perceive the situation—what they bring to the words.
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/2011/09/22/the-grumpy-writing-coach-8/

For a good overview of poetic writing, take a look at the excerpt, on Amazon, for Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. It's worth reading for what it says about the structure of language and the power poetry has to evoke emotion.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

1 Year Ago

The poem is not based on after life. It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referre.. read more
JayG

1 Year Ago

• It is when you will be up with God and that is what is referred to as warmer place'.
read more
We will live forever through the works we did.
Who ever afraid of death ,not really afraid. they afraid of the leaving their beloved ones back there, their emotions etc.

you explained it beautifully.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rashi Jain

1 Year Ago

Thank-you❤💕

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