The Devil's Creation

The Devils Creation

Scream into my bleeding ears

Force me to face my growing fears

Laugh at my bloodied tears

Turn my dreams into nightmares

 

Enjoy my endless pain

Mercy? Ha you laugh in its name

Your pure evil, never to be tamed

Playing the same life or death game

 

Sending me into eternal damnation

Willing to kill me without contemplation

Rip out my beating heart without hesitation

Craving the same satisfied sensation

 

Turning my hopes into dust

You say you do it because you must

Never knowing when enough is enough

Not stopping until my heart busts

 

To free myself I grab a gun

Ha, you think this is so much fun

Collect my soul when the deed is done

Then start hunting for your next victim

 

 

Reviews

[~ Stefanie ~]

Wow a very powerful, emotional write. Very descriptive as well, and the story spoken throughout the piece was told well. One suggestion... I would make the font slightly bigger cause it was a little difficult to read on my laptop screen. Haha

Anyway, another great piece from you! Loved it!

[EMF]

Powerful, full on and with real guts. I loved it. It's not often you pop up on my RR but I'm always glad when you do

[NicoRide]

I LOVE THIS!!! XD
I can SO relate to this and I just...LOVE IT!!! It flows very well and it would make the most epically epic song EVER!!!!

[JRB]

Sending me into eternal damnation

Willing to kill me without contemplation

Rip out my beating heart without hesitation

Craving the same satisfied sensation

nice lines good write

[Thea]

This poem is totally stunning!
I actually enjoyed reading it, every description and expression you put in there...
Like it...
:)))

[paparapapa]

Intense. I find this poem really powerful. It flowed really smoothly and the rhymes were pretty good. And I love the Ha's, they add impact to the line. Great job. :)

[Arielle Ann]

wow...I marvel at the anger that bursts out from each line!

[Nihilum]

Turning my hopes into dust
You say you do it because you must
Never knowing when enough is enough
Not stopping until my heart busts

Amazing.