Element.

your red core and world have trouble colliding
and you're tired of the burn never subsiding
breathing fuels, nothing cures, holding tighter
postponing the one who will take you higher

my white ribbon isn't harnessed by any means
i can give you all of me and not be who leaves
yet, how your face begs me to help extinguish
charring me, smoke blinding me, i can't unhitch

it's too cold outside to expect anything warm
i may only find my peace in the eye of this storm
i want to grab your shoulders and shake out ash
you're okay, it may go on, it isn't all meant to last

you're waiting for the snow to fall around you
and we all have faith in the weather, too
i could never get you out of your daydream
all the while you burn, i've heard your scream

Reviews

[Silvario]

A very enjoyable read. Excellent pace and rhythm, very smooth. I never could get a rhyming poem to work for me. Seems to be effortless for you, I'm jealous!

"i may only find my peace in the eye of this storm"
Great line here. Speaks volumes.

Well done yet again :)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This is primal and yet lovely, you have captured something quite profound about relationships in this, I particularly liked:

"my white ribbon isn't harnessed by any means
i can give you all of me and not be who leaves"

[Joanna Johnson]

I like the ending...sad, reflective.

[krish]

NICE,........
LIKED + LOVED = ENJOYED.......
GREAT JOB...

[John Stussy]

Brilliant poem you've shared here. Your imagery was potent, the rhythm of your words perfect, for the story you painted with your words. Thanks for sharing this piece with us!

[soliloquy]

Very nice! I love the selected photo for this one too.

I especially like the first line of the second stanza about the white hot......nice.

[An owl on the moon]

You have an amazing ability to infuse so much emotion into your powerful, rhythmic lines, weaving a personal history with the mystery of what might come... a true poet. your intricate metaphors are flawless... So glad you're back around, Rebecca!