Becoming The Fluidity.

I want so badly never to be heard
To live as if I wasn't completely absurd
Points in time make it hard to connect
As letters form words too hard to forget
I wake up alone and finally feel that song
All along it was different, but I wasn't wrong
I can't believe I wanted to believe
Acknowledging reality kills the dreams
I remissness holding them to know nothing
Now I'm told my lie is when everyone's bluffing
Thoughtless is something I can't do
And it won't happen while I'm with you
Red consumes from my throat to my tongue
When I realize the air is outside of my lungs
I can't discover now that I need it the most
My feel is securely covered by an external host
I pry my eyes open with a disillusion
It's a problem lacking countless solution
I f*****g didn't want to be known, or know
If I wear the water, I'll blend into the undertow

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Acknowledging reality kills the dreams"
This line has kinda stuck to me..
I think we're all part of the fluidity of the world..some wish to flow with it while some just are forced to..
There is so much in this piece I can relate to..
Heart-felt..

[Horizons]

You've compared a life with the fluid .. the water. It's having so many turns and ways to pure itself from the impurities as same life's ways to make it beautiful again living but depends on people how they make it beautiful, how they move on. Very creatively demonstrated well designed poem you've shared with others to let know what's exactly "Becoming the fluidity". An excellent job, well done!

[Sami Khalil]

A great read and write. I really like this one...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Rahul]

The smoothness's in your nice words and the write is much appreciable. lovely written and offfcourse well penned it is. The flow of ink is great, i'm mad at your these lines
I f*****g didn't want to be known, or know
If I wear the water, I'll blend into the undertow...!

great job :)

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

thank you. i half smiled at the fact that you were mad. lol

[Leigh]

It would nice to blend in and just be a part of nature and live an easy much simpler and happy life, that's what I get from this and it was put very eloquently, with a hint of sadness. Nice write and title

[Jenna]

"Points in time make it hard to connect
As letters form words too hard to forget"

Love the way that sounds. This forms together beautifully and it flows nicely. Just like the title Fluid.

[soliloquy]

Somehow, strangely, I relate.

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

thats the intention(;

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy,..]

there is a lot of pain and passion with this piece, then you finished the ending with some anger, nicely done.

[Frieda P]

This is ingenious...so many great lines.

'When I realize the air is outside of my lungs'

'If I wear the water, I'll blend into the undertow'

Really blown away by the entire read, but those were my favorites. Kudos!

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

i'm so pleased you liked it! thanks for the review! :D

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, this was unique.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow that is pretty smooth, that would be great to read as slam poetry... the world never seems to make sense, even when we think we got things figured out something happens that proves us wrong... then to mix in the complications of love. Awesome work.

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

thank you so much(: