Cupid

Cupid

A Poem by redalia
"

you left us alone

"

I’m just saying,

it could have been different.

Do I have the right to say that?


It’s snowballing.

You left us alone.


It could have been different,

I’m just saying.


Would you mind taking over?

I’ll keep going.


What I say echoes back.

You left us alone.


Gonna be way worse

when they’re not here anymore.


They got back together.

You left us alone.


These are the shield, the sword,

the anger we’ve stored.

Would you also like to see us fall?

 

Are you coming back? 

You left us all alone.


Stupid, stupid,

absent cupid,

where do I go?


How on earth could I have known

you’d leave us alone?


© 2017 redalia



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redalia
please let me know what you think!

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plain talk and keeping it real...love love love your use of cupid ...certainly needs to take more credit for the pain ..very enjoyable read for me..wouldn't change a thing
stupid cupid! ;)
E.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redalia

5 Months Ago

thank you! i'm happy you enjoyed reading. stupid cupid, indeed! x
Stupid, stupid,
absent cupid,
where do I go?

Loved this part, I think this write is very good
much enjoyed

Posted 6 Months Ago


redalia

6 Months Ago

thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed reading!
i felt this!! your writing is from the heart. nice work!

Posted 6 Months Ago


redalia

6 Months Ago

thank you so much!
These are the shield, the sword,
the anger we’ve stored.
Would you also like to see us fall?

LOVE These lines right here, Very nicely written and wonderful flow. I like your style of writing.

Posted 6 Months Ago


redalia

6 Months Ago

that's my favorite part too! thank you so much for reading and for your review.
i like this poem. it has a nice rhyme and rhythm to this piece.

Posted 7 Months Ago


redalia

7 Months Ago

thank you, i appreciate your review!
I like this write, it gets the feeling across and i like the descriptiveness. very well written

Posted 7 Months Ago


redalia

7 Months Ago

thank you so much!
I found this very emotional and powerful. It reads like a confessional. Which adds to the intensity. Nicely done.
- George

Posted 7 Months Ago


redalia

7 Months Ago

thank you for taking the time to read this, and thank you for the review! i tried to make it sound e.. read more

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Tags: loneliness, separation, abandonment

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