Cupid

I’m just saying,

it could have been different.

Do I have the right to say that?

It’s snowballing.

You left us alone.

It could have been different,

I’m just saying.

Would you mind taking over?

I’ll keep going.

What I say echoes back.

You left us alone.

Gonna be way worse

when they’re not here anymore.

They got back together.

You left us alone.

These are the shield, the sword,

the anger we’ve stored.

Would you also like to see us fall?

 

Are you coming back? 

You left us all alone.

Stupid, stupid,

absent cupid,

where do I go?

How on earth could I have known

you’d leave us alone?

Author's Note

please let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

plain talk and keeping it real...love love love your use of cupid ...certainly needs to take more credit for the pain ..very enjoyable read for me..wouldn't change a thing
stupid cupid! ;)
E.

[redalia]

thank you! i'm happy you enjoyed reading. stupid cupid, indeed! x

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

Stupid, stupid,
absent cupid,
where do I go?

Loved this part, I think this write is very good
much enjoyed

[redalia]

thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed reading!

[GoldenHour]

i felt this!! your writing is from the heart. nice work!

[redalia]

thank you so much!

[just is]

These are the shield, the sword,
the anger we’ve stored.
Would you also like to see us fall?

LOVE These lines right here, Very nicely written and wonderful flow. I like your style of writing.

[redalia]

that's my favorite part too! thank you so much for reading and for your review.

[charlotte]

i like this poem. it has a nice rhyme and rhythm to this piece.

[redalia]

thank you, i appreciate your review!

[Karmee]

I like this write, it gets the feeling across and i like the descriptiveness. very well written

[redalia]

thank you so much!

[G.A. Grim]

I found this very emotional and powerful. It reads like a confessional. Which adds to the intensity. Nicely done.
- George

[redalia]

thank you for taking the time to read this, and thank you for the review! i tried to make it sound emotionally intense, i'm glad you think i managed it.