Raspberry's Veil

Raspberry's Veil

A Poem by redalia

please let me hold you



you’re being pathetic,

take off your ring.

come this way,


you’re never that far away.

take off your face,

I’ve seen what’s underneath.

I’m sorry,

promise I won’t call us sad again,

fine, but



take off that ring, 

we can’t marry.

wipe away your makeup. 

they can see it’s just product.

the worries in your head

are your only flaws.

cry out of only one of your eyes 

cause the other has to see somewhat clearly.

please don’t fight me,

you’ll fall if you don’t let me hold you.


let me hold you.

I promise

I’ll get you the veil you want.

come here

and we’ll run away at midnight.

© 2018 redalia

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Hi redalia What's going on? Love take off your face seen what's underneath / Cry from one eye only hahahaaha Very original and happy ending Nice different uniquely written Keep on writing you

Posted 3 Months Ago


3 Months Ago

hi jason, thank you so much for your review! x
lots of creative tension built throughout says i! love her name "Raspberry" ..and being the consummate optimist...i am glad for the more or less happy ending :)

Posted 3 Months Ago

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3 Months Ago

thank you for your review, i'm still not very happy with this piece but i feel better about it now!

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Added on January 3, 2018
Last Updated on January 3, 2018
Tags: love, separation, reunion