Madness

Madness

A Poem by Ella

Madness can take over anyone, As soon as you point that gun,

What’s the use in trying?                                                  You will only end up dying.

Who would have thought one action, Could cause such a huge reaction?


I point, I shoot, I kill,

                             It really is such a thrill

 

I see the deep red blood being splattered,

                                                             Thanks to me all your dreams are shattered,

I hear the loud screams.                                     Is this real or just a dream?

I see the signs of panic.     Now everyone is manic.


                                                                              I see what I have done,

                                   But the fun has only just begun.


© 2011 Ella



Author's Note

Ella
Just a note to excuse the disorganised layout but I deliberately laid it out like this because I wanted it to represent the panic and the irrationality of the situation this unfortunate person find themself in.

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Awesome write! I really liked the concept behind this piece, and thought that for such an emotionally difficult, tough topic, you captured the idea really well. The disorganised layout was so effective, and I liked the thought that went into that. A very piercing, intense ending as well. Nice write,
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Posted 6 Years Ago


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hmm
WOW, this is plain awesome,
I really love this. It's quite intiguing and ponderful.
Awesome job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think thats what makes this poem so great, like your thoughts come in bits and pieces. This was a great poem in the context of committing a murder, and how for some it is only just the beginning of the killing spree!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This makes me think of an assassin or something along those lines. Not a serial killer. too simple for that. Some one demented.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the layout, and the poem itself is brillant, I mean you expressed the emotions so well!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Posted 6 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The layout makes it feel like there are two voices speaking in one mind and neither one is sane by the way. Killing I thought was a hard thing to do, but this person has it mastered and packaged as fun.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awesome write! I really liked the concept behind this piece, and thought that for such an emotionally difficult, tough topic, you captured the idea really well. The disorganised layout was so effective, and I liked the thought that went into that. A very piercing, intense ending as well. Nice write,
~PaperHearts

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting poem. Killing like all things is a require taste and skill. Most people struggle with murder. I like the description and the set-up of the poem. A wild and crazy poem. A outstanding poem.
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Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i really love the way this is set out. it's intense and honest, i think, and that's way too rare these days. great stuff.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The layout is good, it helps the poem get across what you aimed for it to sound like. I love it. It's well written, interesting, all around very good work. :]

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 2, 2010
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