Heat -wave

Heat -wave

A Poem by revalatia
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Blinded by the solar rays-                              
 Of searing SoCal summer days.
As every thought is set ablaze-
  A melted speech my voice conveys.
Discernment lost in smog-filled haze-
  Of spirit parched in several ways.
A thirsting which  my soul relays-
 Through empty rooms and dark cafes.
Drying up, my heart decays-
  Canteen dry as such caches.
I'll roam this desert, search chalets
 Until the stars have caught my  gaze.
My slightest shift becomes a maze-


 Desiccated by these SoCal days.
The pain abound my heart outweighs.
 



© 2017 revalatia



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I have no words.....my voice is in my awe!!!!

Well done!

Posted 11 Months Ago


This is excellent. Every line resonates and speaks. Love the analogy and double meaning. Like the entire piece but favorite: "Discernment lost in smog-filled haze-
Of spirit parched in several ways.
A thirst for you my soul relays-
Through empty rooms and dark cafes."

I can't get over this. Bravo!

Posted 1 Year Ago


revalatia

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
I appreciate the repetitive rhyming and lyrics are great also

Posted 1 Year Ago


revalatia

1 Year Ago

thanks dude :)
Whoa! Whoa! Whoa! This is like flossing my eyes and ears with silk... Chalets? That was such a rich vocabulary word you put in there and overall very well worded, this is the first work I read of yours and now I'm gonna read much more!! 100pnts!

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is brilliant! After your very kind words on my writings, I felt like reading something of yours. The rhymes are outstanding, gives it such uniqueness, something different than a lot of other pieces on here. Amazing work :D

Posted 1 Year Ago


revalatia

1 Year Ago

Thank you muchly Willa :) Glad you like some of my work as well!
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Gee
That reads so well, the flow, rhyme, a right good 'un

Posted 1 Year Ago


revalatia

1 Year Ago

thank you ..appreciated :)
Meanwhile, I sit here freezing my a*s off and complaining about it. Great to see you writing again, missed that.

Posted 1 Year Ago


revalatia

1 Year Ago

Wrote it while rebooting the deathbox last night .. guess it takes something as simple as broken ele.. read more
Lorry 4.9

1 Year Ago

there is always good from bad :)
I really like the line "Of spirit parched in several ways." That made me think....I like when words do that for me! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago



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Added on September 26, 2016
Last Updated on October 24, 2017

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revalatia
revalatia

Azusa, CA



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Thoughts in motion..words spiraling inside me.. more to come.................................later....In the meantime.. My own moment of clarity.. was realizing repeating the same mistakes over and ov.. more..

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Beeware.. Beeware..

A Poem by revalatia



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