Ramblings today

Ramblings today

A Poem by revalatia
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Just a little more rambling ..

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I'm inclined to resign 
   each time I rewind.
But it's once I've defined
  just what keeps me confined, 
I realize that I find
..It was all in my mind

I'm hoping next time
   I align with mankind.

© 2017 revalatia



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A fun read! A marvellous attempt at of writing a one-rhyme poem! Well done!

(I'm debating whether the "that" is necessary in "I realize that I find", given each time I read it, it either doesn't help the musicality or it's fine.....but that's a petty comment, this is overall a great poem.)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

revalatia

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading this.. And yes I see what you mean..
I adjusted it a bit.. .. flows sm.. read more



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what a fun little write, enjoyed this. Awesome

Posted 1 Month Ago


*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

Hell yes... This was a superb crash of rhyme mastery... Easily breathed between points of meter... Succinct and slams home the misalignment of soul...

Posted 3 Months Ago


Creatively Separated

Great Read

Matthew


Posted 3 Months Ago


nice poem - the rhymes are excellent. I especially loved the end-
"I'm hoping that next time
I align with mankind."

Posted 6 Months Ago


does this mean you have trouble connecting with people

Posted 6 Months Ago


revalatia

6 Months Ago

Yes, as a matter of fact it does
genocide

6 Months Ago

i have troblue connecting with people to don't feel bad
I love the rhyming this piece has, and the simplicity yet delicate intensity it holds. Always great pieces from you!

Posted 6 Months Ago


revalatia

6 Months Ago

thank you very much for reading and reviewing :)
A fun read! A marvellous attempt at of writing a one-rhyme poem! Well done!

(I'm debating whether the "that" is necessary in "I realize that I find", given each time I read it, it either doesn't help the musicality or it's fine.....but that's a petty comment, this is overall a great poem.)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

revalatia

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading this.. And yes I see what you mean..
I adjusted it a bit.. .. flows sm.. read more

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revalatia
revalatia

Azusa, CA



About
Thoughts in motion..words spiraling inside me.. more to come.................................later....In the meantime.. My own moment of clarity.. was realizing repeating the same mistakes over and ov.. more..

Writing
Beeware.. Beeware..

A Poem by revalatia



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