Life:P

Idk. read and review i guess.

As I was walking home from school one day,

I glanced into the sky.

I felt a sense of enlightenment,

Like looking through His eyes.

I could see all those that would come to be,

And all of those that have.

I could see the beauty of the world,

And the sin beneath our masks.

I sat down on the pavement,

Contemplating my visions.

I sat there on the sidewalk

Questioning the world.

"How in that little upward glance?"

"Did I see the million years to come, and all of those that have?"

Author's Note

ignore grammar and spelling please.

Reviews

[Annalisa]

...I like this and I don't all at once. This would be beautiful if only you showed the reader instead of told them.

[Rhan F. Sydney]

Very very good. I did enjoy the light breeze that this poem stirs up. It's very soft and very romantic. Thank you for the entry.

[We are young.]

Amazing.

[Onyx Sky]

Intriguing and very unique. You did a wonderful job in provokingt thoughts of wonder and enlightenment. :) Thanks for submission

[Anita B Jacques]

Out of this world, I hope. Great write my dear. Very catchy with the sound effect, you made my black cat jump. The quality of your writing is superb, thank you for sharing. GOD BLESS.


Bear hug
Annie to my friends

[Arthur Crow]

You're a visionary� This is very good writing, I was captivated by the questions and reflective nature of this scribe.

[~angelalala~]

i love this poem. i don't actually believe in god in the christian/ fundamentalist way, but i was moved by this. i think looking up into the sky makes us remember how tiny & insignificant we can be & makes us think. beautiful write.

[Fallen Angel]

wat else is there 2 say u r a good writer.

[kbob]

I pictured it as someone staring into the sky and his gaze piercing right into heaven itself.
Nice job.

[Sean]

i think you should expand this because I'm not sure what is being said. There seems to be a great idea lurking within but it isn't fully developed. Don't fear the reaper. I'm going to eat your flesh. But in the meantime, think about what I said. Don't be shy.