The Girl

The girl is of water 

The girl is of tears 

The girl hates her life 

The girl has her fears 

The mother don't like her 

The mother don't care 
The mother is fire

The girl she can't bear 

The father is tired 

The father is drunk 

The father don't know 

The girl ain't a punk 

The sister just left her 

The sister is gone 

The sister don't call 

The girl wrote a song 

The girl runs away 

The girl is in pain 

The girl finds the ocean 

The girl sat and sang 

The ocean is water 

The ocean is tears 

The ocean accepts her 

The girl lost her fears

Author's Note

I know I say don't when it should be doesn't don't leave any negative comments on that please it's poetry in a little girls eyes.

Reviews

[SkaiWeeks]

This was beautifully written. Truly, it's a great piece.

[Rhea752]

Thanks :)

[SilentScreamingTears]

Within a few words you have showed a very painful life and showed part of what such a life can do to someone inside. This is very well written.

[Rhea752]

Thank you very much

[Dil Coeur]

I'm sort of a grammar Nazi, but I actually really appreciate the use of don't rather than doesn't in this poem. Beautiful.

[Rhea752]

I'm the Junior Grammar Nazi. My sister is the real Grammar Nazi. She even has a shirt that says Grammar Nazi in Latin and then Greek.

[Dil Coeur]

That is amazing! I need one, too

[Rhea752]

I don't know where you could get one. She got one from a National Latin competition.

[Aehr]

its really beautiful!

[Elege]

Honestly i did not notice the don't being a problem, till pointed out. Beautiful.

The girl runs away
The girl is in pain
The girl finds the ocean
The girl sat and sang

By far my favorite part.

[Falling Leaf.]

I think the don't instead of doesn't accenting the sorrow and anguish in this piece. There is nothing that needs editing; it's simply exquisite!
~The Wilted Rose

[Erin Thomas]

Don't write for others, write for yourself! It's much more satisfying and fulfilling. This is amazing! Really really good, clean, beautiful work!!

[....]

wow such a sad write, so well exprssed.

[MOON]

It has a flow and rhythm to it . Sad good write.