"Cool Guy"

"Cool Guy"

A Poem by richieb
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A fun diddy

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“Cool Guy”

 

I shrug my shoulders

And tip my hat

Lady, I’ll hold the door

I am the coolest cat

 

Bermuda shorts and cowboy boots

Strong manly shape

A sharp fedora

A prince with no cape

 

I laugh, I smile

I wink, I nod

At the end of the night

I walk away with the toughest broad

 

I sing, I dance

I swirl, I twirl

The dancing man

Always gets the cutest girl

 

The siren’s shrill

A most disturbing racket

Soon I’ll be on my way

Dressed in a special jacket


© 2016 richieb



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richieb,
"Cool Guy"
Futile is creating an impression in this life. This poem was one to ponder, albeit meant to be humorous. Please forgive me as I do analyze.
I read the behavior in many guys and gals in this as they look for a friend to fill emptiness.
The last line was a grabber.
"The siren's shrill. A most disturbing racket.Soon I'll be on my way dressed in a special jacket. Yikes sounds like a serious consequence.
In all this I still found myself smiling.
Great one sir!
Kathy

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

4 Months Ago

Kathy,
I tried to have some fun. Along the path of life , we meet man.. read more



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richieb,
"Cool Guy"
Futile is creating an impression in this life. This poem was one to ponder, albeit meant to be humorous. Please forgive me as I do analyze.
I read the behavior in many guys and gals in this as they look for a friend to fill emptiness.
The last line was a grabber.
"The siren's shrill. A most disturbing racket.Soon I'll be on my way dressed in a special jacket. Yikes sounds like a serious consequence.
In all this I still found myself smiling.
Great one sir!
Kathy

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

4 Months Ago

Kathy,
I tried to have some fun. Along the path of life , we meet man.. read more
Nice character....Nice poetry

Posted 7 Months Ago


richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you Jes Pi.
I like the character very much in this poem.. I enjoyed the read its beautiful, keep writing

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you Farhan for the kind review. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. Looking forward to read.. read more
The dancing man

Always gets the cutest girl

Ain't that the truth.
And at a salsa club, one guy could be twirling two girls at once while the rest of the schlubs just sulk in a corner with their jack lol

Liked this. It was fun.

The last part kinda came from left field. Not sure if this guy is getting carried away to the looney bin or what, but if he is, maybe "stray jacket" instead of special jacket?

Or if it's not a special jacket - maybe denim? Leather? dunno, but I am curious about the jacket lol



Posted 9 Months Ago


richieb

9 Months Ago

Allessander,
Thank you for reading and reviewing "Cool Guy". I am glad you .. read more
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BBP
Cool style here.... The words fit the vibe and plate d a cool story in a smoky nightclub with a standup bass in the background!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

I think Cool Guy would like being in a jazz night club. Thank you for your thoughts.
BBP

9 Months Ago

Or just a rockabilly bar lol :)
The others below took my thoughts. This is fun to read. I too like the last line.

Excellent poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

11 Months Ago

Pale,
Thank you for reading. I enjoyed writing this and can'.. read more
This poem is, as the name would suggest, cool. It had a very smooth flow, and I got a nice vibe from the piece. Great job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


What a fantastic, cool write! It's as if a script itself weaves its way into a poem very vividly......... Great work! "I laugh, I smile I wink, I nod At the end of the night I walk away with the toughest broad", priceless!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

1 Year Ago

Thanh you for reading, I am glad you enjoyed the poem. The ladies just can't get enough of .. read more
Reflection

1 Year Ago

And they probably never will!
I am really enjoying what you have depicted in this poem about a cool guy. Particularly you worded what this cool guy is doing in his life to be cool. This piece also looks like a song. Nice job, Richieb with nice choice of words… I love it… :-) I will review your other works later... please give me sometime to read and write a riview...
Best
Szhzia


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

1 Year Ago

I am glad you enjoyed this poem Szhzia, it was fun to write. Take your time as l.. read more
SZHZIA

1 Year Ago

It is my pleasure........ and you are most welcome...
That was fantastic! You've got a great knack for keeping the poem upbeat and light through form and rhyme. Your language was well suited and very concise which served the piece well, and that ending was perfect. I can just picture the "cool man" being carted away in bermuda shorts, cowboy boots, a straight-jacket, and a "sharp fedora" to top it all off! Really great!

Posted 1 Year Ago


richieb

1 Year Ago

Thank you Hailey for the great review. I'm 61 and I have not drank in 36 years. Now you know .. read more
Hailey Juliet James

1 Year Ago

Ha ha! That's great, really a priceless thought!

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