Touch an angels wing.

Touch an angels wing.

A Poem by richieb
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I am getting old and losing my buddies.

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            Old work boots and empty coats.
           Rusted locks and smooth worn
           keys.
          September turns to the chilling
          wind.
     

        Broken bottles and shattered glass
        All that's left are the tattered seams
         of promises long ago.

        First came laughter, now comes tears.
        I am Blessed that I got to laugh.
        We were young and played tough
         drinking whiskey cowboy style.

         Scattered cards and poker chips.
          Old pool halls and empty bars.
          Torn down haunts, now used for
           parking cars.

          Broken clocks and an empty flask.
          Blood and beer were the colors of
           our youth.

          The creeks have smoothed the jagged
           rocks of yesteryear.
           When cussing and praying filled the
           same cup.

        Fogged mirrors and faded pictures cloud my mind.
        I need a friendly face to share my lies.
         I am getting lost, losing my way.
        I have to close my eyes so I can see.

       I need an angel who has been through the fight.
       One to guide me to the Great Heavenly Light.
       I look to the night sky afar, a tear in my eye as
       I watch another fallen star.

        We were COMPADRES, no one went to jail alone.
         I long to see my fallen friends on great white horses,
        Looking down from the high hills.
        They are outlaws on the Glory ride.

         When you finish your journey Brothers, rest easy.
         I long to stand with you again.
         Tell me, what its like to touch an angels wing.
    
            



 
   



            

© 2016 richieb



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"When you finish your journey Brothers, rest easy.
I long to stand with you again.
Tell me, what its like to touch an angels wing"

This was a great write, really enjoyed. Everything till that last 3 lines, an exciting trip down memory lane and a wonderful wish to fellow "compadres", with great wording.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you JayDee for your kind words. I appreciate your comments and I am happy you enjoyed t.. read more
JayDee

6 Months Ago

A pleasure



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BBP
Awesome story you painted here, I loved the reflection to a simpler time.

Really loved it all and the closing line brought goosebumps.

Well written. Killer piece.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

5 Months Ago

Thank you so B.B.
This one came from the heart when I lost a life time f.. read more
BBP

5 Months Ago

You honored your friend well! It was wonderful.
richieb

5 Months Ago

I appreciate hearing that.
Great tribute to your Band of Brothers. I feel your sadness at their passing and of being the one that's left. Beautifully written.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

5 Months Ago

Thank you Annette for your tenderness. We all have to face loss's and many times we find.. read more
Loved the thoughts and ideas processed into this piece. A well written free flow poem.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you Dillion for your favorable comments. I am pleased you enjoyed the poem.
.. read more
"When you finish your journey Brothers, rest easy.
I long to stand with you again.
Tell me, what its like to touch an angels wing"

This was a great write, really enjoyed. Everything till that last 3 lines, an exciting trip down memory lane and a wonderful wish to fellow "compadres", with great wording.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Thank you JayDee for your kind words. I appreciate your comments and I am happy you enjoyed t.. read more
JayDee

6 Months Ago

A pleasure
Tell me what it is like to touch an angels wing..... the perfect ending to this well written poem. I can feel the emotion in your words. Very well done :) Julie

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

7 Months Ago

Julie,
Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.read more
I love this poem. Don't ask me why. I just do love it. Haha.

Posted 7 Months Ago


As my dear friend Misty said...outstanding imagery..evoking deep emotions. Those with whom you grow old but never realize that they too were very mu a part of your life until you lose them. That feeling is just a gift of life even though it is painful.

Posted 7 Months Ago


richieb

7 Months Ago

Queen,
Thank you for the heartfelt review. Our feelings reveal the depth of ou.. read more
Beautiful....

Scattered cards and poker chips.
Old pool halls and empty bars.
Torn down haunts, now used for
parking cars.

Broken clocks and an empty flask.
Blood and beer were the colors of
our youth.

The creeks have smoothed the jagged
rocks of yesteryear.
When cussing and praying filled the
same cup.

Fogged mirrors and faded pictures cloud my mind.
I need a friendly face to share my lies.
I am getting lost, losing my way.
I have to close my eyes so I can see.

The imagery in this piece is on fire. I love the scenes that this conjured in my mind.. I love fiction so this was almost like reading a story, someone recalling the pages of their life in retrospection... Magic..
..Misty

Posted 9 Months Ago


richieb

9 Months Ago

Misty,
Thank you for the strong review, I truly appreciate it. I .. read more
M. L. F.

9 Months Ago

I understand that completely... That magic comes through in spades here. Somehow pain is the pen's .. read more
Enjoyed the poem very much-- the narrator in search of answers remembering past events that were or are what makes him but he finds himself nearly alone now looking for answers. I too notice the rhyming and I thought you were going to finish the poem with some sort of rhyme scheme in the last stanzas. Seemed a little awkward there in just that one stanza.... again enjoyed

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

richieb

9 Months Ago

Thank you for your comments Jeffery. I do need to clean up the rhyming scheme. I appreciate y.. read more
Beautiful. An incredible reflection of life. Many youth should read this poem, and understand that life is not everything it seems to be while one is young. I can see that a lot of heart and emotion was put into writing this piece, and my heart goes out to you. Memories are now what you have, and beautiful things they are. I love this. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


richieb

9 Months Ago

Passionate,
Thank you for your heartfelt comments. This type .. read more

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richieb

Shelby, OH



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