In The Last Place That I Looked

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

In The Last Place That I Looked

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I never really knew exactly
where my heart belonged
I’d wander in from town to town
but everywhere seemed wrong

No matter what I did
it never seemed to be enough
A tuckered out pretender
who had called his final bluff

It seems like I have always had
my face against the wind
The path is always steeper
when your heart is full of sin

It’s sad when all the things you want
are right behind a wall
It’s scary when you try to climb
and think you’re going to fall

I’ve spent my whole life fighting
just to let my soul be free
Never realizing that my troubles
were with me

I’ve walked so many miles
but I never really moved
My feet were always taking steps
but nothing would improve

I scaled one more peak to see
a wasteland down below
The trail only went one way
with no where else to go

I finally realized that I would
never find the end
I crawled out to the very edge
and started to descend

I walked into the dessert
looking for a flake of snow
They said I wouldn’t find it
but then how were they to know

You’re searching for a miracle
is what they said to me
You’re looking for one drop of water
in a deep blue sea

I told them that I didn’t wish
To tempt the hand of fate
I said the answers that we need
Can never come too late

They said no matter how I try
I can’t escape the truth
I told them I was ready
for whatever I am due

I finally stopped advancing
as I came upon a hill
The clouds above were moving
but my world was standing still

I stopped as mighty winds released
my spirit to the sky
I waited for the tears to fall
and hear the thunder cry

But all I felt was scorching pain
as I began to burn
I failed every chance I got
and now it was my turn

I fell down to my knees and
slowly lifted up the sand
I felt each second I had wasted
falling through my hands

I stared into the glaring sun
until I couldn’t see
Forgiveness was the only vision
that could set me free

I looked until the sky was black
and fell down on my face
Surrendering my dignity
I now was seeking grace

I felt my spirit lifting,
as a light began to glow
That day out in the dessert,
when the sky began to snow

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[April Child]

Great ending, love that! Initially I was put off by the length of the piece but as I began to read I was immediately pulled right in and carried along on the flow. Good observations in here and too many good lines to pull out a few. Its true, usually the thing that we seek is right in front of us.

[Constance]

What a surprising, beautiful end to a lovely piece. The rhyme and rhythm flow naturally and cleanly, with few aberrations, and the aberrations have purpose. I cannot see one thing I would change or alter in any way. It is splendid.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

The last line gave me shivers - just stunning. What a travail to finally reach redemption once giving oneself over to what may be. Wonderfully captivating write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha