a faceless man (the blocks)

a faceless man (the blocks)

A Poem by dan
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two characters from a previous write (faceless man and the kid) return to inflict mayhem

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a man now known for absent face

has turned spent love to violent

(words) deeds.

the blocks, once so carefully arranged,

are swept away by an arm of straw

to skitter ‘cross the floor like teeth

dislodged by selfish thought,

his stock in trade…

his hell-bent rage.

 

the kid now works apprenticed hours,

to burn and learn malevolence;

the hurt once caused by fevered love

has turned that warmth to glacier

spinning, deranged and much too fast

to care about discarded blocks that, once

akin to order, now are shifting shape.

 

the faceless man’s complacency

toward this change of light turned dark

is called success;

he views the kid, now proudly carved

to his own likeness;

his arrogant sneer,

his cackling laugh.

 

dan © 2015


Music: "Eyes Without a Face," by Billy Idol

© 2015 dan


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Oh how wicked .....

What a great piece .... You capture selfishness perfectly well in a poem

And i like the suspense building up

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

N., Yes selfishness is an insidious beast. I believe at least a little bit lives in each of us, but .. read more
B

8 Years Ago

I do believe in being selfless
And what is meant to come will come

No need to .. read more
dan

8 Years Ago

That's very nice of you to say, thank you. take care...dan
the proverbial straw, the apple from the tree and an inevitable fate accompanied by a song from an artist who is still performing the same old songs... makes me wonder, dan, why we have trouble breaking the cycle sometimes... your write has left me pondering my own distance form the tree that bore me... great work, sir!

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

FT, As is your usual, your interpretation is very close to the message I hoped to impart with this p.. read more
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Dan, another remarkable look into the depth of your creative outlet. We are all pieces of our environment . The spreading of the disease...

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

lynn, I am glad for your review, I always respect your viewpoints as they are usually very close to .. read more
That was really cool. It's a message of apprentice turning angry and bitter like his master. At least, that's what I got out of it. It's a shame that this can be necessary to keep our society going. I hate the idea that people have to end up bitter and unhappy for the good of society. I can definitely see why my poem reminded you of yours though. Lovely piece, thank you very much for sharing. I'm sorry it took me so long to read this. :(

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

River, No need to ever apologize for "took me so long to read..."; don't worry, I'm on no time deadl.. read more
A once happy family - torn asunder by some kind of malevolence - infidelity - murder - leaving two very disenchanted human beings with a chip on their shoulder. The man sees the kid adopting strategies which will protect him (even if it means hurting others) but which will ultimately destroy him - but not before causing considerable collateral damage in a lifetime as payback for 'Life' screwing with the man (and by extension, the kid)
Darkest of your writes I felt, Dan.
Love the sneer connection with Idol - Class !
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Anto, Yours is by far the best interpretation of this write that I've had sent to me, almost exactly.. read more
I get a vision of an evil greedy stock broker and apprentice.
Loosely reminds me of Scrooge and his assistant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

I like your interpretation, and I always believe that each individual reader's interpretations are c.. read more
this is tragic...the son raised by the abusive father becomes a reflection of same...the father sees his son as if he is looking in a mirror...and he is sardonically proud.



Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

That is a very intriguing interpretation. I had something a little different in mind, but if that's .. read more
I am struggling to understand this write... perhaps I need to go back and read the earlier writing? I see the kid becoming the faceless man... yet the metaphors confuse me: straw arms/blocks... teeth dislodged by selfish thought...

Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Todd, Reading the original piece in which they were featured would give you at least a glimpse, a hi.. read more
modtoddinc

8 Years Ago

thank you Dan, I will read, and continue to visit... no need to apologize. Thank you for all your wo.. read more
I LOVE BILLY IDOL TOO *SWOONS*! Ok, crazy fanatic girl moment over. Now to serious business...

You mention this is about two characters from a previous write, but I was unable to find it. I just wanted to get better acquainted with the prehistory.

Well either way, what I imagine here is a world where people lose face, they lose whatever humanity is left of them. And the perfect example is of that faceless man. He may have been a humane human once, but now he is an invisible man in fancy clothes spreading awfulness to this world. And the kid, I suppose, has no one else he can look up to. Somehow it's a little easier for him to emulate the faceless man, since there's no eyes that would penetrating one's heart with emotions. I could be so far off!


Posted 8 Years Ago


dan

8 Years Ago

Nadia, That's actually a pretty good read on the dynamic that exists between the two characters. The.. read more

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