her face

a tribute to my love Dee...a repost

her face

 

 

her facial picture smeared like clear tan clay,

painted like a mannequin that dances out to play;

spun into expressions of sporadic disarray,

and left undone to catch the sun

and wish the world away.

 

liquid looks from whispered, crystal eyes,

dripping down to hardened ground where all the fossils die;

a glance before the dove begins to fly

toward the new unblemished dew

she views with bright surprise.

 

the faceless man arrives and starts arranging all the blocks,

voicing wry opinions that the kid so cruelly mocks;

kicking all the toys toward the box,

he gives a wave toward the grave

that holds his heart and all its locks.

 

as he permits his castle-dreams to fade, like warming mist,

she glides into his spectrum lightly, risking to be missed;

all his feelings balled up like a trembling, sweaty fist,

 

                 her loving face, her deep embrace...

                 his heart, his fate…her kiss.

 

 

                      

           

                             dan © 2013

                      

Music: "The First Time Ever I Saw Your Face," by Roberta Flack

Author's Note

Reviews

[PANDORA]

I was not going to comment...then the song came on. I could not figure out where it was coming from but it is in my top 10 and evokes as much emotion as your writing did. Thank you for the read and the song!!

[dan]

PANDORA, This piece was written for my wife for one of our many anniversaries. Roberta Flack's song is one of her very favorites, so when I posted this it seemed only fitting to have the song accompany the write. Thank you so much for your read/review. I will visit your page to reciprocate. take care...dan

[Fran Marie]

A beautiful expression of love that grows stronger with time..
Very romantic and well versed piece of poetry..

Nice work, Dan...

[dan]

Thank you, Fran. I find it easy to write love poems with the real life love I have with my wife, the only inspiration I need. take care...dan

[AaronFreitas]

I see you have an awesome romantic side as well my friend... awesome write!

[dan]

I find it easy to write about the one I love, the romantic side is always her, or inspired BY her. Thanks for the kind review. take care...dan

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This is so tenderly strong and memorizing. I adored your use of bullying on a playground to get across your own self doubt. beautiful piece!

[dan]

Thank you for your personal interpretation, it means a great deal to me to be showered with kind words and thoughts. take care...dan

[Echoes of Eros]

Beautiful glimpse of your loving one. She seems to be a tranquil mystery that leads you closer, and deeper into her presence. There is nothing that can compare to the face of your lover. Everything else melts away into the shadows of his or her light.

[dan]

ER, Thank you for your kind words. To be in love with Dee makes our 23 year journey together (so far) seem as if it flew by fast but also has been in existence forever. I now only wish that I had borrowed your idea in your review and somehow included the line, "Everything else melts away into the shadows of HER light." Thank you for your beautiful review. take care...dan

[Siegfried]

Excellent lyrics. Camelot in a way, with measured sensuality.

[dan]

Comparing my write to that of Shakespeare is a reach, but I appreciate the thought. I actually did write this hoping to have someone make it into a song, but I don't really know any local bands to approach with it. Thanks for the read/review...dan

[Kelsey Rogers]

Side note: the music starting playing automatically in the middle of my reading, in which my butt got a 5 inch vertical because I had no clue my volume was all the way up. After my mild trauma I went back and finished.
The imagery of the girl is absolutely breathtaking. At first I pictured "the faceless man" as slenderman but that quickly changed. I love how the atmosphere changed from calm to creepy. My favorite combo! Love reading your work Dan

[dan]

The faceless man represented me, 'the kid' my lack of confidence when I met 'her." She is now my wife of 20 years and every emotion, every wisp of love mentioned has only been reinforced over time. Thank you so much for your kind words. (And if you review any more of my stuff, check that volume...I have music accompanying most of me poems). take care...dan

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Dan, that was ever breathtaking and exquisite! Very touching and heartfelt. A gorgeous canvas you paint of your love and how it becomes alive and lively as time unfolds.

[dan]

Thank you, I'm merely writing what my heart dictates, and my lovely wife Dee is worth so much more than these words could ever describe. Thank you for your kind words. take care...dan

[fattycbreezy52]

Wow to write such a lovely,romantic piece for someone indicates that the person is equally lovely.I am glad you used such beautiful words and lines to describe the love you share.This strengthens that bond all the more.Plus,a lovely song.Loved it:)

[dan]

Breezy, Thank you so much. I find it easy to write beautifully about one as beautiful a person as my wife Dee. I appreciate the read/review. take care...dan

[....................]

love and life found in a kiss... such a powerful image of love you have given us, Dan... and what a beautiful song to reflect the essence of your love for Dee... beautiful, my friend... simply beautiful!

[dan]

FT, Thank you for your especially kind words. Hey, I have a question for you: did you and sereena just recently do a collaboration that was sent to me? I thought I saw one in my read requests but I may have accidentally deleted it. Or did I already review it? This is bugging me. I looked in both of your writing lists and didn't notice one; is this what losing one's mind is about (rhetorical question)? I appreciate the read/review, thank you...dan

[....................]

ha, no, we didn't collaborate on one... it must have been one she did with someone else, Dan

[sereenaoutloud]

Hey ft i think it could be one you did with Nisreenaa ! :)