dark light (haiku)

dark light (haiku)

A Poem by dan
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a prayer for our brothers in freedom devastated in france

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a city of light


traumatized and quieted


now whispers in dark.


 


dan © 2015


 


Music: "Breaking the Habit," by Linkin Park



© 2015 dan



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I'm getting to this one a little late, Dan, but yes we can all feel these words.

Nicely orchestrated work, and ever so simple.

Love it Dan, good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

A little bit of social commentary in haiku form. Thanks so much for your kind words in review. take .. read more
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Tee
Beautiful short write,
Thank you for sharing

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

I still feel so bad for all French citizens fighting through their fears. Much like Americans had to.. read more
This says it all about what happened in France. I imagine the following night being exactly like this. Quiet, with a heavy sense of horror in the air of what has happened, and of what is yet to come.

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

You're probably a little to young to remember that aftermath of 9/11, but that mass murder on live T.. read more
Amber Lily

1 Year Ago

I was actually 7 at the time and remember that day very well. I was at school and my teacher kept th.. read more
Short but beautiful. I like the message and the way you used the music. This song fits your haiku well.
-Kay

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much, Kaylee, haven't heard from you in awhile! Please send me read requests so I can retu.. read more
Nicely, tastefully done Dan. More power to your pen my friend.

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

Thank you, ANTO, I appreciate the visit and review. Always nice to hear from you, friend. take care... read more
This worked well for me in your choice of style. I found the music to be distracting, but when turning it off or extremely low, and reading and rereading your haiku I found the rhythm. That being said, the words spoke volumes... simple. direct. powerful. I enjoy direct meaning in its simplest form. Nice job Dan. Long time no hear...

Peace, Todd

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

I'm thinking of changing my musical accompaniment; I liked the one I chose because it depicted an ai.. read more
dan

1 Year Ago

Todd, I did change the music to "Breaking the Habit," by Linkin Park. I hope that you like it better.. read more
The darkness is more noticeable for the light that once shown. Do you think they are looking up at the sky and noticing that the stars are still there? Sometimes I feel like we are living in Old Testament times, but God did prevail in the end. May he always do so through the work of his people

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

I'm sure God has a plan but I don't know if circumstances will allow all involved to decipher it. Fr.. read more
JayceeC

1 Year Ago

I totally agree with that, and I think it needs to be more than just lip service. "Whatever it take.. read more
dan

1 Year Ago

Amen to that! dan
When will it ever end? God himself is bowing his head, I am sure...

Wonderful work, Dan!

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

Thank you Kelly. If God has a solution I hope that it is enacted soon. I always appreciate your feed.. read more
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Let the people stand, unite, and say WE"VE HAD ENOUGH!

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

I'm with you 100%, lynn. Something drastic needs to occur to put a stop to the destruction of our wo.. read more
that's a perfect way to sum up the atrocities happening in many locations around the globe--not just france, the tragedies that people face day in, day out, the nightmares they feel and undergo in the dark of the night.

Posted 1 Year Ago


dan

1 Year Ago

Nadia, Thank you so much for recognizing the message I tried to impart. Way too much darkness coveri.. read more

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