Dark

About getting revenge, not moving on, and trying to get out of the,well,dark. Like the dark life the earth has thrown upon us...

My mother
Is a hateful on, she does not care
If my world turns light or dark, if I die
Or live
She is...my mother

One day
Ill make her pay
The price of pain
She has brought upon me
One day
Shell feel it run through her core, in her feet and her head

As I continue my journey
I still find myself dark
In this lonely place, dark
No family or friends
It's just...dark

Didn't getting revenge work?
Shouldn't I be feeling...better.
No, I'm not
I'm just...dark.

Author's Note

Please review this, so I will know what I do or do not need to improve on

Reviews

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

I rather liked the poem - it's simple, has a good pace to it and is, well, dark!

You don't necessarily need to have your poems rhyme but sometimes it adds an additional edge to it, maybe something to consider in the future?

Oh and before you post stuff always always ALWAYS read over it to keep an eye out for any typos; you've managed to miss out an "e" in one in the first paragraph and I'm pretty sure there's at least one somewhere else. That way it seems that extra bit more professional to readers :)

Good job though and keep it up!

[Riri]

Thanks! That really helped! Umm as for the typos, I have some stupid auto correct that I can't figure out, so ill keep on trying!

[Gaelan_Hamilton]

Not a problem! Auto correct is an absolute nuisance I know, it's why I always have it turned off haha!

[HungryGhost]

You have the ability to pull the reader in and make them realise what you're going through in this one! Great :)