Missing a Piece of Myself

Missing a Piece of Myself

A Poem by RiverRei
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Fibonacci sequence formatting.

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Hope.
Gone.
Empty.
Lost within.
Drowning in the tears.
Lost without your arms around me.
The pain carving a hole in my heart that shatters me.
What will I do now that you've decided I am no longer what matters most to you?

© 2015 RiverRei



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I remember at one time I had felt this way about a guy and really in the end I thought of something. If they left then you know what that just means there not the one for me. God has someone special for me and me only. Just think if they walked away from you or if you walked away from them y'all arent meant to be. Great write. Keep writing!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Heartful. I know what you mean. Just hard to get past that initial pain :( Thanks for the rev.. read more



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So hard to imagine it when we are in love and lost in them
but if it did happen you would be okay, yes in pain ..but time would heal that
and you would find your own feet again !!
Few words but expresses so much!
love it River!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


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RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Sereena :D It means a lot that you liked it :)
love it!
Short and sweet!
Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks very much Emily :D
I remember at one time I had felt this way about a guy and really in the end I thought of something. If they left then you know what that just means there not the one for me. God has someone special for me and me only. Just think if they walked away from you or if you walked away from them y'all arent meant to be. Great write. Keep writing!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Heartful. I know what you mean. Just hard to get past that initial pain :( Thanks for the rev.. read more
One more nice poem,
you are getting one more fan of your writings here.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Jeyanthi!!! Pass along the good word! Hahaha :)
Jeyanthi

2 Years Ago

Yeah! Its in air... :D ;)
Wow! I love the sequence, there is a song from Tool which follows song writing in binary. I love reading things, in various pattern but unfortunately can't write so well.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

You'll get it, it just takes lots of practice lol. Thanks for the review :)
Hard to grasp. The concern and love is gone.
"What will I do now that you've decided I am no longer what matters most to you?"
When love died. Died very quickly. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

It's always more than heartbreaking when it dies so quickly...Thank you for the compliments though :.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.
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dan
Emotions. Feelings. Stages of self-examination. Painful realizations. Then a question of yourself, wondering WHERE...while sadly picking up the pieces of WHEN. Very nicely conceived and written, River. Very well done! take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


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RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dan, that means a lot to me :D
Oh my...a fibonacci for me. It's perfect! I like the subject and the way you put it together. Next time try enjambment so the lines wrap to the next line in places. For a first try, its awesome. Maybe even better than my first one. BeUutiful!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Jan :D This is how bad my vocabulary is: I had to look up the definition of enjambment. :( So.. read more
JayceeC

2 Years Ago

yes, so the
lines wrap through
the piece lie this instead of all of
the lines s.. read more
RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I will try that next time, thank you :) *HUGS*
Nice job with this one. I like the format as well as your choice of words, and their order. Reminds me of a few songs... Like "Bulevard of broken dreams" by Greenday. Keep it coming:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dani The Unreviewed

2 Years Ago

I can't send read requests, because my phone wont open the page, or when it does, then it blocks...
RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I'll look into it then :)
Dani The Unreviewed

2 Years Ago

Thank you:)
Nice work... good flow even with the fibonacci sequence. Still kept the meaning deep and a beautiful piece. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Aaron :) You're awesome!

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