Walking With God

Walking With God

A Poem by RiverRei

I was walking along the beach,
God at my side.
What did we find?
A conch-shell,
abandoned.

I pointed it out to Him,
marveling at its beauty.
He said it signified
my feelings,
how I felt endangered...

How could that be true?
Is He just spouting cheap words,
so faith isn't swayed?

I know now I'm dreaming.
The scene changes and God
has left my side.
He's lost in the growing crowd.

As if searching for my faith,
I scour the crowd,
looking for God,
but I only find myself.

In a mirror,
staring back at me.
My twin,
but she holds all my doubt,
my fear,
my sorrow,
my racism...

I turn and run,
forgetting about God.
I'm such a hypocrite...
Distaste for all foreigners,
as if they're all illegal aliens,
dragging our country down...
but what about an immigrant?

They aren't all the same,
I shouldn't be so quick to judge,
since we are all human,
and will all be welcomed by God
as we enter the pearly gates.

Now I see,
what God was trying to show me.
Stop feeding the hate,
and learn to love thy neighbor,
as we are all brothers and sisters in Him.

© 2016 RiverRei



Author's Note

RiverRei
Written for the Blue Rose Cafe's Tolvi's Ten contest.

-Awarded 3rd place in the "Only Poetry!" Contest.

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This actually really captured me to the point where i had to re-read it, you have some talent here and really should carry on.
Your adapting was brilliant, it reminded me of the footprints in the sand short read about God carrying all of us through hard times.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I absolutely love the poem, Footprints, and I'm honored and overjoyed that you've related mine to th.. read more
Pixieblue

2 Years Ago

Haha, you are truely welcome



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RiverRei,

You are a beautiful writer and this is an outstanding submission to Tovli's contest.

Thank you for joining in. This isn't exactly a "Haibun" as the rules stipulated, but you followed the rules and included all the "ten" words in an unique and lovely write!

Kind regards,

Helena

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Hi Helena!

Unfortunately, I misunderstood what the format of a Haibun was :( I though.. read more
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Helena

2 Years Ago

Hi River,

Not a problem. I was a bit confused myself and was going by the example in.. read more
It's very creative, honest and beautiful. The message of non-judgement is needed...More people need to read and absorb the words. Great writing. Thank you so very much. Dale

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks very much, I'm thrilled you enjoy my work!
Confuser

2 Years Ago

You're welcome RiverRei: You're very talented...
I agree and very hard to do.
"Now I see,
what God was trying to show me.
Stop feeding the hate,
and learn to love thy neighbor,
as we are all brothers and sisters in Him."
Strong poetry with great wisdom. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dear friend :) I haven't read the bible but I like to think I can still make Him proud .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are and you are welcome.
Very well written. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read it, Country Girl! :)
great piece River, very spiritual. Love the deep message passed in such a 'walking' feel.:-)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Richie :)
This actually really captured me to the point where i had to re-read it, you have some talent here and really should carry on.
Your adapting was brilliant, it reminded me of the footprints in the sand short read about God carrying all of us through hard times.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I absolutely love the poem, Footprints, and I'm honored and overjoyed that you've related mine to th.. read more
Pixieblue

2 Years Ago

Haha, you are truely welcome
What lovely poem!
Keep it up!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks very much Emily :)
Full of sacred wisdom, my friend! Sorry, I am so speechless!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Wow, I've made you speechless?? That's an accomplishment in itself :) Thank you, my friend :)
Great write and great message! You can feel your passion behind this write shine through!

Posted 2 Years Ago


RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you Sereena :) I'm not used to writing about God so I'm glad it was well written. Thank you!!!.. read more
It is very differently sketched poem...
A right message too, thanks for sharing. :)

Best of luck to win the contest. ;)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Jeyanthi that means a lot :)

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