Astray

Astray

A Poem by RiverRei

There once was a man from far away,
who lost his footing and went astray
but he did not care
just said a prayer
and kept his pace all night and day.

© 2015 RiverRei



Author's Note

RiverRei
Limerick attempt number 2! Be harsh :)

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i can not be harsh as i cannot do them at all! Anto and Gee and AM can do them and they are hilarious but i can chat and be super sarcastic but i cannot write funny at all!! just doesnt flow easy!!
SO i take my hat off to you for doing such a awesome 2nd Limerick !!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Sereena :D I'm sure with practice you can do it too :)



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i can not be harsh as i cannot do them at all! Anto and Gee and AM can do them and they are hilarious but i can chat and be super sarcastic but i cannot write funny at all!! just doesnt flow easy!!
SO i take my hat off to you for doing such a awesome 2nd Limerick !!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Sereena :D I'm sure with practice you can do it too :)
Potentially good, just missing that humorous aha in the last line.

~peace, Todd

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I know that limericks are usually meant to be humorous, but I was trying for something different wit.. read more
modtoddinc

2 Years Ago

alrighty then. Nice work.
I think it's good. Like I said before, I never tried it, it's a very special form of poetry. Very well done, RiverRei. :) Rudi

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

No problem Rudi, as long as you enjoy it I'm happy :) Thank you very much!
Nice attempt, it's a proper limerick.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks very much, Mayank!
Nice I like this one... to me this one had better flow than the 1st. I think it's fun to try new styles... maybe I should try someday :) But yeah.. I like it :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

This is a very fun style so I suggest it :) I definitely felt like I was creating nursery rhymes :P
Sometime better not to look back. May want to return. I liked the poem. Had the feel of a nursery rhyme. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks very much CP :)
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
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dan
River, Are you trying these limericks because someone is giving you assignments to complete? There is nothing at all wrong with trying different genres of writing, but you don't seem comfortable at this at all. Maybe you should write whatever comes to mind, let your imagination take you to places you've never been...and THEN try something new by CHOICE. I am so impressed with the strides you've made in your writing and you seemed happy doing so. So what's up now? take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I'm trying this by choice...you're the only one with a negative critic...
dan

2 Years Ago

I'm sorry for that....dan
Okay he might be a mad racer who lost the right path.... :P
But thinks prayer would be his rescuer... its gooood write River... :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Jeyanthi I'm so happy you liked it :D
I like it

Alot

Only i need to think
What does this mean to me

A lost man

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Well I'm glad you like it and I do like to make people think with my work. Let me know when you figu.. read more
Lingering Soul

2 Years Ago

I see a man who lost his way
And he remembered to ask god for help
And he got it
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No need to be harsh or even critical, dear RiverRei, at least not in this instance. This is very good, and in true limerick form. It's also a "clean" limerick, which as you & I both know is a rarity these days in most circles.

Sad he never learned his lesson and kept committing the same old mistakes. Pity, that...

Well done! ~PB

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Very true my friend! We all have our paths to tread, though :) Thank you for the review, PloughBoy, .. read more
PloughBoy

2 Years Ago

It was entirely my pleasure. :)

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