Poo

Poo

A Poem by RiverRei

There once was a girl who did her best,
who did everything she could to impress.
Nothing it seemed would do,
it all came out like poo...
and all she ever gets is distress...

© 2015 RiverRei



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I think it's very good, RiverRei. Those limericks are always funny. That's a difficult feeling to put into a poem. I've got a little remark, shouldn't it be better to use the past tense in the last line too: and all she ever got was distress... (can be wrong, because you know, English is not my native language).
I really enjoy reading this one. :) Rudi

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I debated that Rudi. I decided to go with present tense only because it shows she still goes through.. read more
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

2 Years Ago

Yes, I understand and you're right. :)



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Oww... This WORLD!!! Arghhh. Every single girl who would read this, would LOVE it and could relate herself in someway or other! Thanks for sharing such an amazing Poem! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dreamer! It means a lot that you took the time to read and review this :D
Destiny Dreamer

2 Years Ago

You are WELCOME! :)
It is hilarious, but at the same time very sad. Flawless employment of a forlorn situation veiled in irony.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Awww thanks Nadia :D You're the sweetest person ever :)
This title caught my eye and I was prepared to laugh. Funny, indeed.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Mayank, I'm glad I could make you laugh :D
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Any verse with toilet humor involved is automatically funny (from the Animal House Book of Rules). Thanks for the giggles. take care...dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

No problem, Dan, thanks for the review!
I think it's very good, RiverRei. Those limericks are always funny. That's a difficult feeling to put into a poem. I've got a little remark, shouldn't it be better to use the past tense in the last line too: and all she ever got was distress... (can be wrong, because you know, English is not my native language).
I really enjoy reading this one. :) Rudi

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

I debated that Rudi. I decided to go with present tense only because it shows she still goes through.. read more
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

2 Years Ago

Yes, I understand and you're right. :)
Another nice one... didn't think I'd see you put poo in a write but I liked it lol

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Me either but it worked out. Glad you liked it.
A suggestion for you river if you don't mind. If you could make it like a haiku, the impact would be even more great since it is a short poem

Posted 2 Years Ago


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RiverRei

2 Years Ago

It's a limerick, Terrence, which is much different than a haiku, but I appreciate the suggestion :)
Terrence Chang

2 Years Ago

My sincere apologies for my innocence. I did not realize that. How foolish of me
RiverRei

2 Years Ago

No problem, I wouldn't have known if I had been trying it as a new form of writing :)
O lord, this is such a simple representation of the worlds worst day!
It actually could be transferred to so many things and yet could still just be used in a everyday sentence.
From a rock to a hard place and back again!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Pixie, I'm thrilled you liked it so much!!!
This is awesome and os fun..you really OWN this style my friend. I find them so hard so i take my hat of to you and bow at this only being your 2nd attempt and already this fantastic!! go Girlie
For some reason I said this in my minion voice (oh poop) heheh

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Hahaha thank you very much Sereena you're so sweet and supportive :)
You smashed it here RR ! You can have this limerick badge to wear (8) - sorry its a terrible badge but it means so much more that the brackets and digit that comprise it.
Congrats -
and the message is loud and clear. I would say this in retort

There once was a tryer called Rei
Who worked at her craft night and day
She got limericks down pat
Then said, "How hard was that?"
But I got there in the end, she could say.

Kudos RR !! :))


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

RiverRei

2 Years Ago

Thanks Anto, I love when you write stuff for me, makes me feel good. You're awesome!
ANTO

2 Years Ago

your very welcome Rei. Well what's next ? How about the tanka format?
5 lines with the syllab.. read more
RiverRei

2 Years Ago

That's interesting...I'll need to do some research on it but I will definitely look at it :) Thanks .. read more

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