A Windy Walk

Yesterday

I walked the dogs.

The wind was strong

Lifting them in the air

Like kites

I held them to earth

By their leashes

And watched them bob and weave

In the sky

Above the golden grassy fields below.

A flock of Canadian geese flew by

A feathered bagpipe squadron

On a mission to the south

Honking and squeaking on the wind

The dogs

Barked and pulled

And for a moment

I was weightless

It was all I could do

To keep one foot on the ground

Holding them back

From a merry chase

Across the blue blue sky.

Reviews

[Jamie]

I really love the imagery of this poem. As I ready, I can easily picture all of this.
I picture the dog just bobbing up and down like little rubber balloons in the sky, and the annoyed handler trying to reign in their dogs, stretched outward, heel digging into the ground and being pulled forward exactly as described: a kite would pull a person forward in a strong gust of wind.

All around, i'm in love with the imagery. That is my absolute favorite part of this piece. It's so light-hearted, particularly in comparison to my own writing. It's refreshing.

"...bagpipe squadron..." Sounds about right to describe geese, actually. Never thought of them that way. They're obnoxious, but bagpipes... maybe it's that Scotch-Irish heritage in me, not so much. Regardless, love the metaphor. Fantastic work. Just a little jaunt... through the sky though, rather than through said grassy fields described below.

Well done, as always, Chip. :3

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Elandril. Yes, this is my light hearted side. I'm a moody guy. :-)

[Jamie]

Coming from someone who's been diagnosed bipolar II, I feel you, Chip. I feel you. xDD

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. You create place and wild vision. I did enjoy this tale.
Coyote

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Chip.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Oh this was a great word painting, thinking with your imagination how this experience made you feel. This a great example (the doggies lifting off) Also thought the idea-Canadien bagpipe squadron. I am a pretty new writer and I know it is work to write but still I am encouraged to see how a person can put there imagination into a thing on paper which seems real. Good writing.

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Kathy. :-)

[Stan Lee]

Ah, so much fun! A merry chase across the blue blue sky! Like pretty much everyone else, I loved the "feathered bagpipe squadron, on a mission to the south, honking and squeaking on the wind" Really lovely imagery throughout and I very much enjoyed the happy-go-lucky tone. :) Thanks for sharing with us Chip!

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Andronicus!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Those Santa Ana winds really kick up a storm here in San Diego. I've seen an Adirondack chair picked up and blown into my neighbors front window. Poor puppies. I never imagined what they must go through, with no control over their floppy ears.

[Chip Murison]

Ha ha - yes. Poor pups. That's why they deserve treats from time to time. :-)

[Penlady]

You have a playful heart...I loved the feathered bagpipe squadron....could hear them announcing as always their crossing...I am so enjoying your writing! Charles Bukowski is one of my favorite also...

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Penlady. I'm enjoying yours as well. Ahh a Bukowski fan. Usually I get a cold stare when I mention him. LOL.
I'm a big fan of his poetry. Actually, full disclosure, I only started writing poetry after reading his poetry which I never did until 3 weeks ago. I've been a big reader of his books (over and over) for years though.

[Penlady]

Well, then, just see how Bukowski has inspired after only three weeks in his presence! I lived through much of the time he writes about and his talent is not that he is any more brilliant than any other man...it rests in his ability to take you where he abides...I guess that is the talent of a good writer...

[Chip Murison]

Yes - I agree. He makes it real by being deeply ruthlessly honest. That is the key to great writing.

[Karmee]

wonderful write here, enjoyable read, once again love the imagery

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Myconcern!

[EvaThornburn]

Cute write, found it a pleasure to read.( giggle) Eva

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Eva. :-)

[EvaThornburn]

Your Welcome

[Chip Murison]

Thanks! 😆