Wish

Lyrics to a song

I wish that I could tell you

All the things inside my head

But my words fall down upon the ground

Their meaning lost and dead

I wish that I could show you

The love that's in my heart

But I look away, afraid to say

And I feel us drift apart.

Sometimes we live in different worlds

The fault is all my own

Although we are together

I feel like I'm alone.

We went down to the ocean

And watched the rising tide

You did not understand my words

So I kept them locked inside

I sit and watch my thoughts run by

Some are selfish some are cruel

At home in silence my tears arise

Like fountains from a pool

Sometimes we live in different worlds

The fault is all my own

Although we are together

I feel like I'm alone.

You say I am too serious

Like its something I could choose

You want me to be different

Sometimes I feel the blues

Life is such a journey

Sometimes I feel the pain

My words are lost in the howling wind

Of things I can't explain

Sometimes we live in different worlds

The fault is all my own

Although we are together

I feel like I'm alone.

I feel like I'm alone....

Reviews

[Jamie]

Glad to see your writing back up. Could feel a lot of weight in this. A whole lot less enigmatic than what I've read previously. I like it—the raw emotion in poetry.

All poetry is great, but the very blunt, very real, poetry is always some of my personal favorite. Glad you shot me a read request.

Rhyme-pattern is fantastic, and the repetition is spot on. Keep writing, man. Being redundant here, but glad to see your writing up again.

[Chip Murison]

Yes- i agree. I love the blunt direct approach too. Really more my style but I recently got a guitar so I've been experimenting with lyrics for songs. It's kind of fun for a change. The rhyme and rhythm spin the words and meaning off in unexpected directions.
Thanks for the review. As always I have high regard for insights. ;-)

[Jamie]

Ooo, guitar and lyrical experimentation. If you come up within anything particular, definitely share here.

Schrodinger's Cat (too lazy to put the proper "o" there) is still a favorite of mine to look back at. Might be me being a nerdy psych student, but the references to that and Occam's Razor are still something I find glorious.

Not being completely off topic there: given that, I'm sure lyrically, you can do something awesome.

[Stan Lee]

Very emotive, descriptive, metaphorical, lyrical (of course) and beautiful. This was a very tight piece of poetry and I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing Chip :)

[Chip Murison]

Thanks Andronicus! Thanks for reading.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words. I liked the feel of thoughts leading to honest ending. Easy to feel alone. Few people try to see us in the real light. Thank you Chip for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chip Murison]

Thanks so much Coyote. :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Chip.

[Tbear]

Oh Chip.. this piece tugged at my heart..so wistful it was. Really nice prose... write on..

[Chip Murison]

Thanks a lot Tbear. Heh - yeah, it tugged my heart quite a bit too writing it. Very personal. It was kind of cathartic getting it down on paper.
Thanks for your review.

[Tbear]

I know the catharthis undertaking well. You may appreciate my I Dont Know Why piece..am glad to have found you ...

[Chip Murison]

Ha ha. Yes, I'm reading it right now. :-)

[Najam Us Saher]

I like the way you have expressed your emotions. I can feel your feelings and the nostalgia behind it such true are your words. Truly well written.

[Chip Murison]

Thanks so much Najam. I really appreciate it.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.