Ancient Stones

Ancient Stones

A Poem by Robert Ray


Throw down those ancient stones

Fallen from above, mined beneath

So heavy on your weary bones

A woeful legacy to bequeath

 

Rather, erect a stone citadel

Temple, mission, or cathedral

High atop the highest hill

Equal with the nested eagle

 

Find the sun, cut a fresh trail

Ascend, above the alpine flower

Feet slow and steady on shifting shale

Look out, site your new watchtower


Dig, chisel, stack, on vacant bedrock

Ancient stones upon to watch and walk


© 2018 Robert Ray



Author's Note

Robert Ray
A revised draft, incorporating a few suggested changes.

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This message echoes across the land with a strong metaphor . . . for me, it's about not continuing to lug the heavy baggage each of us is often born with, but instead find new building materials & craft a new edifice up high on a mountain of one's choosing. That's a brilliant message well done (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Robert Ray

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Thanks, Margie. You hit it. Appreciate very much the review.



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This message echoes across the land with a strong metaphor . . . for me, it's about not continuing to lug the heavy baggage each of us is often born with, but instead find new building materials & craft a new edifice up high on a mountain of one's choosing. That's a brilliant message well done (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Robert Ray

1 Week Ago

Thanks, Margie. You hit it. Appreciate very much the review.
Rather, erect a stone citadel...
not sure what citadel is but enjoyed this awesoem piece of poetry

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Robert Ray

1 Week Ago

Thank you. A "citadel" is a type of fort or fortress (strong, able to withstand enemy attacks, etc... read more
just simplee I write

1 Week Ago

okay, thank you. now I know. you learn something new every day
makes me think of the Dwarfs of "Lord of the Rings" ... stones .... and ancient stones at that ... Stonehenge ... The Ring of Brodgar. ...Boscawen-Un. ...(your poem inspired me to red up a little on them ;) its a fine connection made between the ancient and the fire of self actualization .. i like it ... you must have a passion to see others be themselves fiercely ..nice
E.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks once again for reading my work. I enjoyed reading your comments. Yes, I appreciate authenti.. read more
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I think i really like the second paragraph alot. Dramatic in it's own way.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you.
Very very interesting piece! so profound, goes deep into real thoughts and messages, for those who can, who want to grasp, I hear a call to rise over, history, religions, politics... a revolution for one self, to be free, to build our own ongoing tower aiming to see the Sun, to feel it with our own hands instead through others, let it be from the past or now, let us not take them for granted, those ancient stones, but to learn from them how to make ours.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Yes, so much richness, especially in your interpretation. Thanks so much for taking time to read an.. read more
I liked the logic of your words.
"Dig, chisel, stack, on vacant bedrock
Ancient stones upon to watch and walk"
I agree with your thoughts and I liked the above lines a lot. Thank you Robert for sharing the amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

It's great to hear this one spoke to you, Coyote. It's every writer's goal to touch at least one re.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

I enjoyed this one and you are welcome.
I can feel the weight of the world in the stones, and sense this vision to change them, to transform them into something new and lifting for the soul. So powerful and uplifting.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks very much for reading and share your kind words. Much appreciated.
if that's what you wanted to say...that is how it should stay......

no one should try to change or correct or question your moment and your words.....

there is no right or wrong but the personal inner satisfaction in using words to create what you are seeing.......Evey person that reads it will see a different thing in it......but that's words.....

don't do what others tell you......you are not them.

if someone answers or changes your exam for you...it's not your work

I prefer to read about you...your first draft as you say.......not the revised edited reworded you.

I write my words once and once only.....if I make a spelling errors I leave it....what's done is done and that was how it was.

and I don't see the world the same way you do.....my world is dark hurtful painful haunting and evil.......

I struggle with positive reads.....

but you are awesome at what you are trying to say I think my friend......leave it as it is.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading and you're encouraging words. Very much appreciated. I'll leave this one as .. read more
i am LiLy

2 Weeks Ago

I will check it out my friend.....

thank you.
it's like use all the stones that have gotten in our way...all that past built up...knock it down and rebuild....we have to erect new temples...not just live in the old ones...reminds me a bit of how religions can be sticklers to the old ways, when it just isn't logical to keep doing that.
j.

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts!
I really like the changes you’ve made definitely added to the poem rather then taken away

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you. I appreciate your feedback. It definitely made this one better.

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Added on December 31, 2017
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