Betrayed

Betrayed

A Poem by Robert Ray


Once-white petals beneath,

Withered shoulders sagging,

Her blue companion departed,

She dances only with the wind.

 

Glaring through frosted panes,

Denying her suspended grave,

She envies the single cut rose,

Atop a carved cherry pedestal.

 

The ravished perennial poses,

Drinking from deep crystal,

Bathing in sheltered sunlight,

Oblivious death awaits.

 

The winter geranium weeps;

For only the dead see the dead.

 


© 2018 Robert Ray



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Robert Ray
Critical, candid feedback sincerely appreciated.

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Death approaches and it is inevitable. That is what this poem says to me. It reminds me of a slow slide into decay. A gradual vanishing of something once vibrant. It was well written and the imagery it brings is quite vivid. I had to read this slowly to let it sink in and allow my mind to digest it. I love poems that forces me to linger a while on the lines and really let them sink in. :) Thank you for that,

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Robert Ray

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Thank you, Dianne. It's always good to read your reviews. I'm pleased to see you took something aw.. read more



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Death approaches and it is inevitable. That is what this poem says to me. It reminds me of a slow slide into decay. A gradual vanishing of something once vibrant. It was well written and the imagery it brings is quite vivid. I had to read this slowly to let it sink in and allow my mind to digest it. I love poems that forces me to linger a while on the lines and really let them sink in. :) Thank you for that,

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Day Ago

Thank you, Dianne. It's always good to read your reviews. I'm pleased to see you took something aw.. read more
This is sharp like glass. Each word carrying deliberate intention. A vial of poison lingering in every line. I really like this. Nice work.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you. This is perhaps my personal favorite. Good to see you picked up on a theme. :)
duff

2 Weeks Ago

You're very welcome. Awesome job.
Dark and incredibly sad.
Still, there is also great beauty.
Work to be admired, Robert!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks much, Jimmy. Sadness and beauty often come in the same package, as you've noted.
a beautiful tragedy. darkness and beauty have been merged in this poem.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks, Savanna, for reading another! This is probably one of my favorite works thus far.
It is too easy to leap into conclusions after reading this one through several times... I want to think a bit and return.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, Chris. I look forward to reading what you come up with.
this poem touched me. I like how you put how you was feeling in this

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thank you!
Cassaundra Emmons

3 Weeks Ago

your welcome
This poem not only took my breath away, it stabbed me in the heart. Beautiful.

Posted 1 Month Ago


The word 'perennial' jumped out at me. In a bitter-sweet-poem about death, and the inequality of who gets 'honoured' and who just withers away, the word 'perennial' reminds us that the plants will come up again in the Spring.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Good catch on "perennial." You're the first. I chose to include it because it speaks in part to th.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

1 Month Ago

My humble philosophy is :- everything dies, so that the new can have life! :}
Words of gorgeous richness spiral in my mind as I picture the story you are telling me. Indeed we take nature for granted, even though beauty envelops it. A magnificent read!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks very much! I appreciate you taking a few moments to read and comment. Greatly appreciated.
PandaPeaceful

1 Month Ago

Truly no more problem. Talent is something your hand breathes.

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Added on January 8, 2018
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Tags: reflection, self discovery, redemption, flowers, winter, wind, roses, death

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Robert Ray
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Madison, IN



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