My Imperfect Mona Lisa

My Imperfect Mona Lisa

A Poem by Robert Ray
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Based on a true story.

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An imperfect Mona Lisa crumpled on cold tile,

Splatters from a deviant brush, a wall gooey red;

A hideous portrait, haunting, her vanishing smile.

She had a pretty face, I thought, mind twisted.

 

Her lover, the wicked artist on foot, drew my pursuit,

Pistol out, radio squawking, feet and heart thumping.

Out of sight, in sight, front site---shoot or don’t shoot?

She had a pretty face, I thought, blood hot, pumping.

 

Silver shields on blue uniting, shouting, sirens wailing.

Here, gone, barricaded, cowered in a random shack.

She had a pretty face, I thought, kneeling and waiting

His surrender---stained hands chained behind his back.

 

She had a pretty face, I thought in the dark, crying;

A young man with a gold badge, still new to dying.

 


© 2018 Robert Ray



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It's very impressive and amazing that you fit such a big moment in tiny words. It reminds me of how powerful writing can be. The way you scripted the emotion to linger until the last stanza is powerful. This entire piece is powerful. Thank you for sharing this moment and a piece of your mind.

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Robert Ray

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Thank you for the kind review. It's great to read your comments. I appreciate you taking the time .. read more
Final-Karma

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You are very welcome!



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For some reason this reminds me of how I feel when I play Grand Theft Auto.

If your looking for feedback, I wouldn't change a thing, so... I got no feedback. Sorry.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks for reading, TK. No apology needed.
JohnsDavidburg

1 Month Ago

It is always my pleasure.
This poem took my breath away. “She had a pretty face”- life and tragic death. A poetic flashback of an event, a reality, that cannot be unseen. Great form, flow, rhyme, staccato rhythm and style- like gunshots. A man caught in the crossfire...I am sad both for the victim and the survivor, you, who will never forget. Great job my friend.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Annette, thank you for reading and your detailed review. It was a tough write. I appreciate you ta.. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

1 Month Ago

You are very welcome Robert and I wish you peace.:)
This graphic account packs a wallop.
Don't know what's worse: being new to the dying or practically becoming immune to it.
God help the besieged police officers!


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Thanks for the read, Jimmy. To answer your question, being desensitized is worse. Is losing a piec.. read more
Oh this is heartbreaking, so terribly sad. I have always felt gratitude for the job of the police (the goods ones). What they learn about the darker corners of society I am certain alters a human mind forever. Your experience with this poem is hard to grasp, can see why it is transfixed in your mind... forever. Just like the survivor you suffer the same fate, and will never forget. Great poem, heartbreaking subject matter.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

1 Month Ago

Heartbreaking certainly. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. I was inspired to write .. read more
Karen Redburn

1 Month Ago

I'm grateful the short story inspired and you were able to put to paper and share that inner turmoil.. read more

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Added on January 22, 2018
Last Updated on January 25, 2018
Tags: death, murder, law enforcement, police, crime, blue, PTSD, trauma

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Robert Ray
Robert Ray

Madison, IN



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