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A Poem by Robert Ray


My mind 

 is a dinghy on the open sea,

Rocking... pitching...

 thrashing... saving me.

Adrift I am in a salty haze,

 no horizon in view,

Mere blinded captain and 

 own one-man crew.

From isles of chaos I swiftly flee

 --lost in space, joyfully free.


© 2018 Robert Ray



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"My mind is a dinghy on the open sea,"

What a charming and relatable opening line. Not a yacht or a speed boat or a pleasure cruise or a pirate ship. A dinghy. A darn dinghy, so easily tossed by waves of emotion, changing winds, whims, what have you. I can totally see myself in a dinghy of my own, barely staying afloat and paddling along with little more than stick, and yet, I'd take that dinghy anyday:
"Rocking, pitching, thrashing, saving me."
While tumultuous and hazardous and frankly not altogether sea-worthy, that dinghy is the only thing between you, and me, and the bottom of the sea, crushed under extreme stress and pressure and unbearable emotion.
"I am a blind captain, a one-man crew.
From isles of chaos I flee---lost but free."

What a beautiful ending. I really identify with the blindness metaphor, it's something I used to use in alot of my work and still do, that floundering through the murk of the mind, hugging the wall, following little more than mental breadcrumbs. And yet, it's so freeing. An escape from physical, social, and environmental ailments. A salty sanctuary, un-safe safe-haven.

God I love saying dingy.

This was a fantastic little piece. To me it was perfect. Seriously, don't change a thing, unless that dinghy catches a current and that's what you gotta do.

Thank you soo much for sharing this, I love the metaphor and the poetic style and simplicity of this piece!!

Hailey

p.s. dinghy

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

It is a great review. Make me laugh, too. The "God I love saying dingy" comment.

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Alexa Apothic Red

2 Weeks Ago

I enjoyed the edit.. better movement.. not so staccato.
Hailey Juliet

2 Weeks Ago

As did I, the format is better post-edit, definitely more interesting to visually read and it felt l.. read more



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Don't we all truly navigate our own boats in the massive ocean we can life? lol Sometimes we may hit some rough waves here and there. We may also get pulled into some captivating currents occasionally, but its all your will at the end of the day. I really enjoyed this piece Robert. Keep on writing my friend.

Posted 1 Day Ago


This poem radiates hope; expressing desire for the continual adventure of an unhindered mind.
One rousing piece of work that strongly uplifts individual freedom!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


It's a good piece from the start. The fear and future of isolation is on display due to your words. Nice word choice selection. I like it for sure.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks much! I always appreciate your reading my work and taking time to comment.
duff

2 Weeks Ago

You bet! I'm a fan
The mind's a mess mostly, I feel, so of course we tend to flee or at least try to... Such a self reflective piece, just the way I like writings to be. One which makes (this) reader to introspect too.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading. You're so right on the "mess" comment. Somehow, we're able to bring a bit of o.. read more
I can see the fun you had with this. Great visualization and flow

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Cherrie. Yes, this was a fun write. It flowed from my head much easier than other works.. read more
I like the brevity. It allows the reader to personalize general thoughts.

Language is our lifeline; civilization is our island. Everything else is wonderfully scary.

I read a frightening article about a cargo ship named the El Faro yesterday. Caught in one of the worst hurricanes of this century she lost power and sunk leaving no survivors (this was just a few years ago). That's what happens when left TOO freely in the open sea... overwhelming death is soon to follow.

We are not free. No one is free. Anything beyond the thought of it is impossible. Just ask Ted Kaczynski.



Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks, TK. I appreciate the read and your comments. I wasn't familiar with the El Faro story. I'l.. read more
I think there's something in the atmosphere of the ocean that stirs one's imagination. I know I feel deeply inspired whenever I'm at the beach, walking on the pier and listening to the waves crashing. Your opening line gave you that same incentive, and boy did you run with it! What's not to like about this...I loved it, Robert! Great reflection, and energy!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Kelly. I lived along the south coast of Georgia for 15 years, so I can relate. I'm not .. read more
That's just wonderful, my goodness where do you find your material?

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you! It's junk scattered in my brain most mornings. I just string it together to salvage it... read more
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Karen Redburn

2 Weeks Ago

You're just amazing like that :)
I liked this one Robert. I love the sea and I would be in danger if I floated away alone. Thank you for sharing the amazing words and poetry.
Coyote

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Coyote. I know you're among the most requested reviewers, so I appreciate you taking tim.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

Was my honor and I love your work. You are welcome Robert.
"My mind is a dinghy on the open sea,"

What a charming and relatable opening line. Not a yacht or a speed boat or a pleasure cruise or a pirate ship. A dinghy. A darn dinghy, so easily tossed by waves of emotion, changing winds, whims, what have you. I can totally see myself in a dinghy of my own, barely staying afloat and paddling along with little more than stick, and yet, I'd take that dinghy anyday:
"Rocking, pitching, thrashing, saving me."
While tumultuous and hazardous and frankly not altogether sea-worthy, that dinghy is the only thing between you, and me, and the bottom of the sea, crushed under extreme stress and pressure and unbearable emotion.
"I am a blind captain, a one-man crew.
From isles of chaos I flee---lost but free."

What a beautiful ending. I really identify with the blindness metaphor, it's something I used to use in alot of my work and still do, that floundering through the murk of the mind, hugging the wall, following little more than mental breadcrumbs. And yet, it's so freeing. An escape from physical, social, and environmental ailments. A salty sanctuary, un-safe safe-haven.

God I love saying dingy.

This was a fantastic little piece. To me it was perfect. Seriously, don't change a thing, unless that dinghy catches a current and that's what you gotta do.

Thank you soo much for sharing this, I love the metaphor and the poetic style and simplicity of this piece!!

Hailey

p.s. dinghy

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

It is a great review. Make me laugh, too. The "God I love saying dingy" comment.

.. read more
Alexa Apothic Red

2 Weeks Ago

I enjoyed the edit.. better movement.. not so staccato.
Hailey Juliet

2 Weeks Ago

As did I, the format is better post-edit, definitely more interesting to visually read and it felt l.. read more

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Tags: mind, thinking, reflections, doubt, despair, blind, sailing, life, death, freedom

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