The Truth About Reality

The Truth About Reality

A Poem by Robert Ray
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Society everywhere is in conspiracy against the manhood of every one of its members. -- Ralph Waldo Emerson

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A strong lady in the harbor,

Stars on a striped flag,

An old Declaration,

A living Constitution,

A moon with faded prints,

Young eyes skyward.

“Naïve romantic,”

 the old man cracked,

Muck under his nails,

 stains on white cotton.

“Rationalizations,

 fear,” the boy whispered,

Youth evaporating,

 leaking beneath;

Drops of independence,

 rusty drips into the

Bucket of conformity,

 the community well;

Tainted waters---

 poison rationalizations,

 synthetic toxins,

 another’s reality---

Dream killers!

Doubts to purge…

Waves to ride.

 


© 2018 Robert Ray



Author's Note

Robert Ray
This is a work in progress. Initial thoughts would be greatly appreciated.

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so much of this, from my point of view, is so spot on ...watching the chipping away at the fabric of our USA is heart breaking ..has been ongoing for decades ...Russian interference indeed ...where have the Dems been for the last 50 yrs???? no .... make that 70yrs .. Russia is and always has been set against our life and for its downfall .. now we have the Caliphite attempts as well to contend with ... your poem opens a good can of worms sir ...maybe if we all just go fishing eh!? love the Ralph Waldo quote as well ... my ranting would be way too lengthy .. the corruption of the youth is high on the to-do list for our enemies ... along with gun control, ridicule our leaders, control the schools and press ... they have a text book for it ..i am amazed we don't expose it daily arrrrrrrrrrrrgh!
E.

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Robert Ray

2 Days Ago

Thank you, E., for another thoughtful review. Your comments express what many feel--frustration (ri.. read more



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What I like about your message is that you do not appear to be playing any kind of blame game, which many do, but to me, blaming is a big part of the problem. Can't we all just mourn the demise of our social fabric & political norms without making it about one group or another? I feel your poem is neutral, but I see some of your reviewers are not. Our hearts all break the same way & your details paint the picture I no longer want to look at for very long these days! *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

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Robert Ray

2 Days Ago

Margie, thank you for another kind review. I always enjoy reading your comments. I always try to b.. read more
so much of this, from my point of view, is so spot on ...watching the chipping away at the fabric of our USA is heart breaking ..has been ongoing for decades ...Russian interference indeed ...where have the Dems been for the last 50 yrs???? no .... make that 70yrs .. Russia is and always has been set against our life and for its downfall .. now we have the Caliphite attempts as well to contend with ... your poem opens a good can of worms sir ...maybe if we all just go fishing eh!? love the Ralph Waldo quote as well ... my ranting would be way too lengthy .. the corruption of the youth is high on the to-do list for our enemies ... along with gun control, ridicule our leaders, control the schools and press ... they have a text book for it ..i am amazed we don't expose it daily arrrrrrrrrrrrgh!
E.

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Robert Ray

2 Days Ago

Thank you, E., for another thoughtful review. Your comments express what many feel--frustration (ri.. read more
Very decent work here, thanks for sharing. The flow adds to the deeper message I believe you have successfully conveyed. Interesting word choices for metaphors last and really bring the piece together in a cohesive manner. I really enjoyed this poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks much, G.W. I appreciate your time and kind words.
"Youth evaporating,
leaking beneath;
Drops of independence,
rusty drips into the
Bucket of conformity,
the community well;
Tainted waters---"

God, that part was so beautiful and poignant! You say this is a work in progress, and perhaps it could use a little refinement in structure, maybe a stanza break somewhere, or something, but there were some sequences in this piece, like the one quoted above, that were breathtaking. I've had a tendency in some of my most recent reviews to ramble a bit and go off on tangents or down rabbit holes, so I will try not to do that here, but I'm wondering how on earth that will be possible with this piece. This poem is such a provocative, powerful reflection of society, culture, and the ever changing landscape of the world where it has never been more perilous, confusing, and convoluted to grow up or grow old.

"Stars on a striped flag,
An old Declaration,
A living Constitution,
A moon with faded prints,
Young eyes skyward.
“Naïve romantic,"
the old man cracked,"

That contrast in experience, opinion, and worldview of the "old man" and the "young eyes". That naivete of the youth seeing the world as malleable, manipulable, movable. Over-optimistic youth v. the harsh reality and observation of the old man who has seen the world and how it revolves and evolves. He knows where it's been, sees where it is, and is more cynical of where it's going. The youth sees little of the past, and looks to the future with a romantic gaze. That optimistic gaze is soon tainted by "rationalization and fear". Rationalizing away the wrongs, the confusion, the past, the present, the future, stripping away the moral fabric of the world that was and replacing it with synthetic, relative, irrational-rationalization, not thinking critically, but allowing the status quo to shape and define who the youth becomes. No challenge, no fight, only fear whispered low, so far below the shouted status quo, so quiet and inaudible that not a soul hears it as it blows away on the howling winds of conformity. And yet, ear to the ground, you might hear that fearful whisper and it is not alone, but one among many, coursing through critical minds, behind open eyes, and through the veins of those whose hearts can't accept the hollow rationale of the whipping winds blowing, but not breathing. Eventually the howling wind fades and comes up gasping for rarefied air among the clouds, the truth about reality far below and out of sight.

Maybe I got a little carried away again, lol, sorry, but this was another really thought provoking piece. I don't know that I could possibly nail down every specific point and reference you make in this amalgamation of truths, images, symbolism, and metaphors. This is maybe my favorite poem I've read of yours, or at least it's right up there. I look forward to seeing what you do in your revision stage if you deem it necessary. As I said in another review of your work, you always seem to make the right adjustments to improve your pieces, as good as they are to begin with. Genuinely amazing poetry here Robert, thank you so much for sharing this one!

Hailey



Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Hailey Juliet

2 Weeks Ago

stanza break*
Hailey Juliet

2 Weeks Ago

distinguishes*
Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you!!! I’ll work on this tomorrow. Greatly appreciated, Hailey!
wow my goodness this is amazing your choice of words and subject is mind blowing yet it is many people's reality dreams can come true but on the other hand many are victims of the muck stink of life for ever great write!!!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Marilyn, thanks again for reading my work and for your kind review. Much appreciated!
Got a lot of imagery and alliterative cacophony of the rust belt flowing through my mind.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading this draft, Maxwell. Still trying to decide what needs fixed.
Emerson was, of course, right.
A powerful piece!

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Robert Ray

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Jimmy. He's my favorite writer from the period. Self Reliance is my favorite literary w.. read more

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