ENDING

ENDING

A Poem by Marie
"

Ending of the light...

"

desert




Sunlight bars

Turn into rust

Moonlight spray

Drifts into sand

Nature has

Abandoned now

To loneliness

This darkened land.


© 2015 Marie



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Oh Nice. Not 100% sure what it is about but I like your word usage.

Posted 3 Months Ago


This reminded me of "The Waste land" by T.S.Eliot. Even good literature cannot make us part with our ignorance until our minds have truly opened. They would remain unsunkissed(allow me to introduce a new word to you) like the darkened and lonely lands you have mentioned.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Marie

2 Years Ago

THank you. I have not read all "The Waste Land," but part of it. I had no thought of this in mind wh.. read more
My wife and I both had the same take on this; referencing the abysmal legacy mankind has cast upon paradise. You are, as I knew you would be, a deep thinker with mastery over words. When writing in minimalistic style, multiple perceptions may be derived from between the words, and the unsaid becomes more powerful than those written. We weave the words with spaces in places where readers insert what they need.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Marie

2 Years Ago

Thanks--but I'm not really a deep thinker. I started with the phrase about "sunlight bars...turning .. read more
The closing of a day to the dark of night A nice write Marie

Posted 2 Years Ago


like Juliet said "we shall say goodnight till it be morrow" ....that light will come again, and the loneliness will subside...

you write nature so perfectly.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie

2 Years Ago

I was meaning it sort of an "end times" thing. You took a more optomistic view.
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Years Ago

that's a switch....me being the more optimistic one out of the two of us...you usually are much more.. read more
Exceptional poetry! Bravo! I loved this!

Posted 2 Years Ago


The metamorphosis of day into night breathes out so tenderly and darkly through your words... what a beautiful loneliness.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Marie

2 Years Ago

I did not see the beauty in it till I saw your review.
Expertly written Marie, and a pleasure to read.
Will

Posted 2 Years Ago


Marie

2 Years Ago

Thank you.

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Added on August 5, 2015
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Tags: sunlight, moonlight, sand

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Marie
Marie

San Antonio, TX



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