god, help me

you yelled

you screamed

i cried

as life fell

and i lost what i need


and so i fell

i sat on my knees

hands folded in front of me

i cried

sobbed

i yelled to you, god

as if all the pain in the world

were shoved into my throat

the words came out

and i choked...

"god, help me"

Author's Note

http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&q=god%2C+help+me#/d2stq61 <--- photo credit

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

I think it would be better without the extravagant formatting and colors. Those take away too much from the poem itself.
Anyway, a nice write, definitely, I liked the way it all came together at the end.
Keep writing!

[Dani]

Interesting use of colors and size. I usually don't utilize such techniques with the text myself, but I like it on your writing. The red speaks out.
As much as we'd all like to think we can, sometimes these things are too tough to swallow on our own. I think that realization is harder than the actual dealing with the problem itself.. or at least for some people, it is.

[Olive Belikov]

Wow. Even in so few a words, it's really powerful. Love it!!

[Brianna Brie]

I like the intensity you captured with this poem. Been there done that!