fate

fate

A Poem by just take a breath

when we cant decide our own path
who steps in?
god?
nobody?
are your lonely feet leading you?

what made the past rough?
what makes the future what it is?
does the world put you forwards
when you don't even know it?

just think about it -
no one really knows what happens
or what makes you go

© 2011 just take a breath


Author's Note

just take a breath
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I really liked that you did not attempt to rhyme ! To write without rhymes, to me, is a very very useful skill to have !
"are your lonely feet leading you?"
sick and deep line, well played !

Posted 12 Years Ago


._. Great work!
I liked the way you asked those questions..they can never be answered..
Nicely done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Philosphy is my favorite subject but I will just enjoy your poem for what it is. I like that you taking a look into what makes people tick on the inside, what motivates us, what drives us or leads us. Interesting perspective and a lovely write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


TRUE. No one knows what lies ahead.

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice work, i sure like this one! thought provoking is right, this was very intriguing stuff here! although in reply to your questions, what do you mean by the past being rough? is it that we remember all our past screw-ups even though it's been so long? in that case don't worry at all, that part has its benefits as well! we shouldn't see everything pessimistically here! use those past screw-ups to learn for the future, and by remembering those, you'll never be arrogant or boastful! (how can anyone be boastful when he/she remembers his/her worst moments?)
please tell me if i misinterpreted that part!
good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


well personally I don't hang with the "it just happens to us" theory, but otherwise I like your write as it raises questions and puts me into the mindset of questioning the world, and that is the product of a poet or any writer for that matter. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Yes. It's been a while since I've felt stumped - usually a sufficient argument comes to mind, but I can't think up anything without being able to shoot a hole through it. Great question.

Posted 13 Years Ago


If you find out let me know! This poem was thought provoking!

Posted 13 Years Ago


So true!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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