Oviedo

I held you, naked as untouched snow

Safer than love’s silence in winter breath,

Slow silence, concealed as flesh to flesh

Lain in life’s bare bed; Soft as Sinatra

Blue you pressed into barren polished sea

To see, be, silent at last, to be lost

In secluded sunless lull, pressed solely

To share sight with my wearied shut eyes;

 

Fallen in trodden tarmac wilderness

With sad stories stooped with silent scars

Fail-tended, unhealed, tethered to death,

Common as Oviedo; Laced with dry Iris

Plaster words push through to end the rest,

Safer than love’s silence in winter breath.

 

Author's Note

I'm not happy with the end but this one wore on me, wore on me.

Reviews

[Ruth]

This is simply stunning!
A beautiful entanglement of imagery of the heart, the first line is one of the most beautiful lines I have ever read, truly :)
If I may say - this is lush! lol
xx

[Forgotten]

I think you should be very happy with that last line "Safre than love's silence in winter breath" i love how it flowed genlty, well done

[emmajoy]

You've created a two tone painting with this, swept the words shaded and dark across a canvas and come out with a sad poem, yet full of longing ..

that last line is beautiful 'Safer than love’s silence in winter breath'

[Linear]

Well i kinda liked the ending, thought it was well woven i enjoyed reading

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

your threading together of words creates an exquisite tapestry of beautiful and haunting images~ the emotive aura is perfectly balanced for reaction in balance~

[Intern'l Shultzfeather]

Images take me uplifted, watching, and then the fall brought me sadly down to checking out what just happened.

[The Warrior Poet]

nice. tarmac wilderness is a neat phrase

[tshigg]

Safer than love’s silence in winter breath,

Nice line, it does effect the emotions. Kind of a slow groove, grind journey into meloncholy. Definately one that makes you think.

[Alice.Valkyrie]

It's so soft, like a feather it brought chills.

[Light]

oh, the bitter touch of loveless cold! "i held, naked as untouched snow." is there a more powerful to start this! great write!