Parched

Parched

A Poem by Roland Petrov
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My first English Sonnet is a tribute to the finely crafted cocktails of Palm Springs, the desert city I work in. Thanks to Richard for his dogged determination to get me to write one of these.

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In summer heat the Workshop Kitchen bar

creates refreshingly delicious art,

so drinkers come to visit from afar.

Enjoying the Palm Springer, that's a start,

'cause there are many cocktails to imbibe.

Bar hopping is a way of Palm Springs life.

To quiet places I in turn subscribe,

oases in the desert free of strife.

The Wexler cocktail is a drink that wins,

with basil, gin, and hint of peppercorn.

If drinking is a sin, I got some sins!

I must confess my body parts are worn.

    Libations are important in the sun.

    Excuse me while I make a liquor run.


© 2015 Roland Petrov



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Well, you are good at the sonnets Roland! :o) Have you not done one before? Some of my WordPress friends do sonnets now and then, they're very good. Although I do like some sonnets, I can't see myself writing one, I just don't think I've got a sonnet brain.

Thanks for telling me of Palm Springs! I guess there must be a lot of liquor runs going on? I'm sure eating chocolate is a sin too - apparently! ;o)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Suzy Hazelwood

2 Years Ago

You wrote an Italian one?!!! Now I'm feeling really intimidated!! :o0

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Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

If you eat chocolate on a bus, how on earth will I get you to write a sonnet?!
Suzy Hazelwood

2 Years Ago

Haha!! I could write a sonnet about eating chocolate on a bus and getting arrested for it?!!! :oD



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haha, Amen brother.

Quick rhythm suits the tone.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well, you are good at the sonnets Roland! :o) Have you not done one before? Some of my WordPress friends do sonnets now and then, they're very good. Although I do like some sonnets, I can't see myself writing one, I just don't think I've got a sonnet brain.

Thanks for telling me of Palm Springs! I guess there must be a lot of liquor runs going on? I'm sure eating chocolate is a sin too - apparently! ;o)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Suzy Hazelwood

2 Years Ago

You wrote an Italian one?!!! Now I'm feeling really intimidated!! :o0

Did you know.. read more
Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

If you eat chocolate on a bus, how on earth will I get you to write a sonnet?!
Suzy Hazelwood

2 Years Ago

Haha!! I could write a sonnet about eating chocolate on a bus and getting arrested for it?!!! :oD
Good one, sinner! I think this topic works for you. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

I must confess that it does.
this goes down as smoothly as an amaretto stone sour, my favorite.

and those cherries....mmmm..

tasty sonnet, refreshing to read one that isn't so serious.

j.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

What is in an amaretto stone sour? It sounds intoxicating!
jacob erin-cilberto

2 Years Ago

Amaretto liqueur, orange juice and sours....delicious...even better with Apricot Brandy instead of A.. read more
Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

Thanks! I'll try it.
A good thirst must be quenched! Love the poem!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland, not too shabby for your first effort, My Fine Friend, and with but a few iambic issues to address, this will, indeed, be made into a splendid English Sonnet.
I very much enjoyed your creativeness in picking the subject, and how most all of us will be able to relate to it; some more than others … LOL!

"Oases" should be "Oasis".

L9 and 11 need addressing, as both end trochaic (soft, or or in feminine mode).
L9 is an easy fix: "WEXler IS the COCKtail THAT is WINNing":
"the COCKtail WEXler, IS the WINNing DRINK,"

L11 takes a bit more effort … "If drinking's a sin, I keep on sinning.":
"if DRINKing IS a SIN, I'll DRINK and SINK."

THUS:
"the COCKtail, WEXler, IS the WINNing DRINK,
if DRINKing IS a SIN, I'll DRINK and SINK." (or some-such … whatever fits your fancy)

L10 another easy fix … "BAsil, CUcumBER, HINT of PEPPerCORN."
"mix BAsil, CUKES, a HINT of PEPPerCORN."

VERY nice first serious effort, Roland, and I applaud you for sticking it out, and with a bit of ingenuity and concentration, there's no doubt you'd have been able to figure it out, too, but I don't mind giving examples to help a friend along the way … still, before you post, be sure you've dotted all your i's and crossed all your t's , after all, it is you whom your efforts reflect, eh? Besides, we both know there is nothing you can't write when you put forth your best effort, and that is the only kind of effort a real poet has … LOL!

End of peptalk, and to let you know … I am really impressed with what you got right … iambics are a challenge for the novice, but are the true heart and soul of flow in any form of poetry. If you learn them properly and use them to compose with, all of your verses will be masterpieces, whether in rhyming or Free Verse compositions.

Thanks, Roland for the ever sincerely appreciated pleasure and honor of sharing your fine skills! ⁓ Richard

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

I capitalized every line's beginning because that seems to be what Shakespeare did; I understand tha.. read more
Richard

2 Years Ago

Roland,
Pure fabrication, the Shadorma is so out of sorts in every way, it was more likely th.. read more
Roland Petrov

2 Years Ago

Another sonnet posted, Richard! How am I doing with iamb?

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Roland Petrov
Roland Petrov

Desert Hot Springs, CA



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