Your Touch

Your Touch

Your touch burns through my body with flames of desire.

 

Your kiss is a cool drink of water on a hot desert sky.

 

The sound of your voice is the wings of an Angle spreading out to embrace my soul with gifts from Heaven.

 

A glance from you sets my heart all a flutter.

 

Your smallest wish is my life’s ambition.

 

The words I write cannot full express my Love.

 

Look to the stars and count ever light, that is the beginning of my love for you.

Reviews

[dw817]

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Nicely written ! I don't know if I would stretch myself out this far for a girl. Was it my Dad said ? Plenty of fish in the ocean. Have you ever read, "The Little Prince" by Antoine de Saint-Exupéry ?
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Little_Prince
If not, I suggest you do - it's a light read, a children's book, but explains well the wiles and wills of a woman - in this case, a ROSE growing on the prince's planet and how she views the world around her.

[ron]

Ok so call me a hopless romantic..lol. Its how I want to fall in love with some one at that level at that degree completly fully without regret. The problem is I tend to fall in love so fast I end up hurting every one.

[dw817]

I seem to have only managed to hurt myself, and quite thoroughly by falling in love. Today, I wear sleeves with little pull-tags on them that say, "Take a number." Some of the intimacy that you seek may not notice you - until they see you can notice yourself.

[ron]

Thats very true. But to look in the looking glass...well thats the rub isnt it?

[dw817]

Depends on how hard you rub your glass. Sometimes Windex helps. :)

[ron]

Oh your a funny one arent you...LOL. And just for the record Windex doesnt cure all ills. (From my big fat greek weding).

[dw817]

I - haven't seen that film yet but I heard it was supposed to be funny. I think I'm always taking the inane and mixing it with the insane and sometimes even the mundane to create something unique. :)

[ron]

You are a very complicated girl...dont change. :)

[dw817]

Thanks but I'm a - *looking down to be sure* - boy. But I have been mistaken to e a girl many times Online. At this point I don't mind. :7

[ron]

I am sorry for for the missunderstanding on my part.

[dw817]

NP, I see sex and gender Online as interdependent and inconsequential in any case. Taking a break, I'll BBL.

[ron]

Your anemi in your profile looks to be a girl. My computer is old and the screen is blurry and thats why I thought you were fem. Sorry. and your right about gender not realy being a factor on this site as it is the substance of the writing that is looked at and not who the writer is.

[dw817]

Actually it's Daisuke from DNAngel.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daisuke_Niwa#Daisuke_Niwa
read moreActually it's Daisuke from DNAngel.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Daisuke_Niwa#Daisuke_Niwa
I liken myself to his personality and found it fits me well, especially the part about the inner dark spirit which is where I think my terrible nightmares come from. I've also gone by several other aliases over the years, the earliest being Dreamwalker because I wrote about all the dreams I had, finally settling on dw817 which matches my initials and areacode. It fit, it's easy to remember, and it's pretty well-known today since I haven't used anything else:
http://bit.ly/124K97A

And yep ! You're right about that ! Anyone can be anything Online. I have no doubt there are some people out there using photos of people that aren't even themselves. I think I look pretty goofy in real life, so I use Daisuke, and I LOVE the red hair anyways ! :D

[dw817]

... continued
and I liken myself to his personality and profile, especially the part about a dark demon residing in him, which is where I think my terrible nightmares come from. I've gone by a few different aliases over the years, the earliest being Dreamwalker cause I always posted about the dreams I had and - there is this state of mind I could enter where it appeared I could walk into the past or the future. I - can't do it today. I arrive and 'something' beats the crap outta me. I'm no longer welcome there.

Anyways, dw817 is chosen for my initials and areacode, and it's pretty well-known today:
http://bit.ly/124K97A

And you're write about the persona ! I imagine there are some people out there who use photos of other people and say it's them. I think I look pretty goofy in real life so I chose Daisuke, and besides, I LOVE the red hair ! :D

[s y e]

Ron this is really good and romantic. Completely different from what I just read, hehe. Another great job from your romantic side.

"Angle" -- "Angel"

[ron]

Thank you Sye. Writing has been an emotional roller coaster ride. I am starting to be able to feel things again but it's still hard sometimes.
It's taken me about 6 months to figure out how to spell Angel...lol

[s y e]

I think writing is an emotional roller-coaster for most, my friend. Most of us write about ourselves and our lives and that is hard. Ha, I used to get confused my soldier and I still can't spell it, really. :P

[ron]

I agree it is hard. Lol that's ok I can't spell it either.

[s y e]

Haha, too cute. Thanks for forgiving me! :P

[ron]

Nothing to forgive Sye...:-)

[UseMeAbuseMeCureMe]

Its good, i like the imagery, if you were aiming for 'falling madly in love' then you certainly got that down pat. good job(:

[ron]

Thank you SlightlyHeardof96 :)

[AnnaLeQuinn]

This is lovely, Ron! I love how romantic you are. Your words are certainly sweet on the tongue!! - Anna

[ron]

Your so sweet I never thought of my self as a romantic before. I will have to give that some thought. I just write as it comes...kind of with out thinking what to write if that makes sense.

[AnnaLeQuinn]

Then you're a romantic at heart!! :-)

[ron]

I fear that is the case dear sweet poet. Alas yet what does my heart cry the world does not hear for fear that I would break into tears.

[AnnaLeQuinn]

Even that was poetic! Look at you go! That's quite the talent. Reminds me of myself. Sometimes when talking with friends I'll throw out a mini poem to get to my point haha

[ron]

I would consider it an honor and privledge if you would share some of your sweet words with such a humble poet (yet ungifted) as me.

[Tate Morgan]

great feeling isnt it What more can feel that good

[ron]

Whe that feeling hits yes. Most of the time its not that why I love that feeling when it doesh it.

[ms. barrie]

exquisite write, that leaves your heart with a sigh, so many beautiful lines here. the last two lines are simply amazing! pen on :)

[ron]

Thank you. The words I write are for the one I have yet to find.

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome'd. -- this was a pleasure to read :)

[rhythm&blues]

This reads as that all consuming love that you can't express quite the way you want to, but you did indeed here, nice work.

[ron]

Thank you. Perhaps you see more of me than I see in myself.

[poetdoug]

"The words I write cannot full express my Love". What a great and passionate phrase you have used here my friend. Then your wonderful climax: "Look to the stars and count ever light, that is the beginning of my love for you." Methinks you need to check into writing 'Valentine Cards" for Hallmark!@
You really do have a wonderful flare for this. Evidently, you are a man of many grand experiences.
Thanks for sharing this with all of the rest of u Ron. Good luck with your novel in the making also!

[ron]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

short,lusty, and full of passion,very nice poem

[ron]

Thank you. The cerdit goes to what i have experenced in my life.

[Sami Khalil]

"Your touch burns through my body with flames of desire.



Your kiss is a cool drink of water on a hot desert sky.



The sound of your voice is the wings of an Angle spreading out to embrace my soul with gifts from Heaven.



A glance from you sets my heart all a flutter."
The touch of love and good poetry . Thank you for sharing...:)

[ron]

Thank you for reading.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)