Please dont Leave

Never thought it was oh so simple i didn't see you standing all along now i am feeling guilty always thought about you never composed a song now the time we missed together feels oh so wrong. Never really said much when you and i were young but as we got older the words exchanged got a little bit brighter and a little bit bolder

C: We walk two separate paths i don't know how much longer it is that i can last without you here they say you realize how good something is once its gone if i had never have felt you everything would have felt so much more wrong because i miss you more then you will ever know and i hope you miss me too because baby your my true love that i cant let go after everything we went through

V1: No other girl could outshine you, a smile brighter then the stars reaching for something i cant see still somewhere in the dark, and all the boys know who you are i promise i would treat you even better then before just keep me close, i now know what loss feels like, i'd always be there standing outside your door so please baby dont walkaway and leave.

C: We walk two separate paths i know if were together we would find a new way to make it last After all love is what you and i want, the thought of you just makes me smile your laugh just like music to my ears and the only thing that i want to hear is that you say you love me because baby you mean everything to me Please dont leave

B: I Cant live without you right now your simply just a part of me and i cant imagine being here without you i would always remain true, i love the way you flash your eyes just keep me in your heart and i will always keep you in mine but now you and me should make the star crossed lovers dream reality.

Reviews

[Joseph M. Shea]

I liked it. I found you lowling in it and feeling what you felt, But not really making up your mind. It would be nice if we could deside for the other what the relationship should be, but it's what each desides that makes a relationship what it is.
Again I would talk about pace and susjest that you try to write from the center of the page and not left to right. See how it feels. Take care, Joe

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

This is really good, but watch out with the "star crossed lovers" phrase, because many star crossed lovers ended up in a world of s**t or dead. But anyway, beautiful!!!

[Falling Leaf.]

Lovely. So many emotions right on the surface. Fantastic!

[justjenn_2u]

Amazing that you can express so much emotion on one page. I enjoyed your honesty and your inner questions. Keep amazing me. Write on.

[MusicLover]

i agree with robbie

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is a lovely piece... written in the most endearing way...to profess your love to someone special, is special within itself. Nice write.

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like about this prose poem is the unusual form and the punctuation, this kind of breathless style takes a ironical look at the content, a kind of self sceptical distance to what you write. Clever.You evoke a kind of verbal panic. A good write.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A love of love piece, written perfectly, the sense of pleading to ones that never really see your feelings is quite remarkable, well done, good read.

[DeliriousCerises]

Wow, I have never been able to write a song. This is a beautiful love-sick song. I think my favorite line is the last one, I bet this sounds even better when heard performed. Good job

[that-little-green-monst..]

Beautiful write! Great job!