Wishing you were here

Im just wishing you were still here even though your far i still feel you near nothing can hurts as much as this loss i play it through my mind this was our last goobye no more smiles no more bright butterflies two hearts broke for what will last a lifetime and leave both of us wondering what we should have what we could be 

Well i'm just wishing you were here this night you and i looking up at the same starlit sky i just wanna be a puzzle piece of your life i dont wanna let you leave you mean too much for me to even think about letting you go you were my love and i wanted to let you know please let this wish come true the only thing i want is you here by my side kissing under this same night sky together forever to never let go 

Those beautiful bright blue eyes have a special story inside yet to be told so come and walk with me for just a bit you not gone yet your just growing sick of it bu before you concieve this defeat i will make you belive in me lets sit here on this beach watch as the waves crash on the winedark sea we are cuddling together this moment in time stands still your laughing and looking at me fondly now i know i made you belive

we only have so much time before you gotta leave lets make the most never glance back on what we both could have had

Well i'm just wishing you were here this night you and i looking up at the same starlit sky i just wanna be a puzzle piece of your life i dont wanna let you leave you mean too much for me to even think about letting you go you were my love and i wanted to let you know please let this wish come true the only thing i want is you here by my side kissing under this same night sky together forever to never let go 

Your finnally here to hold close i knew i knew you coudlnt find it in your heart to let me go what you and i have is true so i want you to know that i fell for you a whole long time ago i love seeing your pretty smile you blush and cant take the compliment this is what our love is as she kisses my lips and i hold on to her lips i just cant let myself let go this is young love for the two of us too know

Author's Note

this was my first song i wrote in 6th grade i just wanted to share it

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

Lots of runon sentences, which makes it kind of hard to follow. Other than that, nicely penned!

[Julia Heifner]

Who the lucky lady? Or guy if you, you know, swing that way... Jk, good story bro, really missing-ful and stuff. But I saw and STILL see alot of uncapualized i's and it bothers the crap outa me. Im still kinda new to everything so, like, this is my first comment. Yay.

[Heromen Selena]

Heartfelt and beautiful, however annoyed the bejeezus outta me. Punctuations would be an excellent addition. They aren't your enemy, they add emphasis and flow to the words.

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

I love this!!! Its so beautiful, even with the errors as they add character to the song. This is really quite mature for a sixth grader, and I agree with Blindfolded, I do hope she got a chance to read this at some point. Amazing write!!!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I can agree, this is mature for a 6th grader at that age. I wish there was a little pauses and errors were there, but it was a great write.

[Hannah Hartless]

it is realy good i rearly like it

[?]

I agree...a very mature write for a 6th grader...and it is a beautiful one too..love the imagery

[Nyx]

casting the few grammatical errors aside (and considering that you wrote this in 6th grade), i'd say it's very lovely. the emotion it evokes isn't too strong but at the same time, it's not dead either. that is, the romantic appeal lies in the subtlety. also, the imagery is absolutely wonderful! kudos!

[Liderien]

I could really see the rhythm in this. Very good. Hope there is music to it.

[Blindfolded]

This is quite a wish and quite a write for a 6th grader. I hope she had a chance to hear this at some point.