"Elevation"

Feet leave the ground,

Feels like flying,

Tears fall, crumbs,

Farewell to Earth, mother,

Father, sister, brother,

Self- this is new, this is alien,

This is the second,

This is the first.

Revelation.

Elevation.

Author's Note

[("Visual Stimulus..."-->Puzzle-bot) contest entry]

Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

Very visual. a mind who is willing to see:)
Many different perceptions wrapped in a well designed, to the point piece.

[realmwriter]

This is flying in words, soaring with birds...! Awesome write...!

[Stammers]

I like the description of tears as crumbs. Interesting analogy.

[IAmGhost120]

I've never thought of tears falling like crumbs before; excellent use of imagery!! Your pacing and flow are well-done, too - good write!!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Interesting, like I am reading my stereo screen sideways. Up and down, thump, thump, thump...

[Sashalee]

great poem, I can just picture the descriptions in my head.

[Muse]

Precise and to the point. You are artistic in both delivery and with the timing of your words. Nice job.

[Ruth]

Brilliant :)
This is reeling and leaves me fulfilled and so concise it really packs a punch, no words wasted and nothing more needed, perfect!
xoxo