Predictability

Predictability

A Poem by Rosie Brooklin
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Don't be predictable; be you.

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Roses are red, and violets are blue.
By now you've lost interest, haven't you?
That poem is predictable, a bit overdone.
Is that why you stopped loving me, why you chose to run?
I cooked, and I cleaned, and I often remained bare,
covered only with a blanket if the cold became a snare.
I thought this was all men wanted; I was the perfect girl.
I maintained kindness and helpfulness; my smile was always curled.
So why, in the end, was I not enough for you?
I suppose I was too simple... 
You don't want roses that are red
and violets that are blue.

© 2017 Rosie Brooklin


Author's Note

Rosie Brooklin
The focal point of this poem is that I was left because I was too predictable, and too often-heard of. Did this make sense in my writing?

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There is so much that can be said to this poem - but mainly ...it takes two and both need to want and work for it to last. Taken for granteds crush couples and a moment's excitements gets taken for a deeper drawing than it mostly was... least for one side.

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Nice flow of thoughts and I liked the ending. Thank you Rosie for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rosie Brooklin

6 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

I did enjoy and you are welcome Rosie.
Predictably humble

Great read

Matthew

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is so much that can be said to this poem - but mainly ...it takes two and both need to want and work for it to last. Taken for granteds crush couples and a moment's excitements gets taken for a deeper drawing than it mostly was... least for one side.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Gee
Makes perfect sense. One partner or the other often looks for the greener grass, excitement, but every long term relationship becomes predictable, comfortable. This has to be offset with making time for each other, date nights,days away etc.
Many folk will relate to this Rosie

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rosie Brooklin

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you appreciated my poem! Thank you for your kind and understanding review.

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Added on October 10, 2017
Last Updated on October 10, 2017
Tags: poetry, loss, love, pain, grief, roses, violets, predictable

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Rosie Brooklin
Rosie Brooklin

TN



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I am an aspiring writer with a passion for many different forms of art. These include literature, poetry, drawing, and music. I'm always willing to critique and looking for critiques, so feel free to .. more..

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