Drowning

Drowning

 

Flashbacks of images

Haunt my quiet moments

And the essence that was once us

Flows slowly from my mind’s eye

As the tears flow from my green ones

 

I once promised I’d catch you when you fall

But you are falling too fast now

And my arms cannot reach that far

So you will just have to stop falling

Until I can find your safety net

 

But then who will catch me?

Who will rush to my side?

As the essence that was once us

Morphs into one that does not fit me so well

And becomes a sea in which I cannot swim

 

Reviews

[Miss Sharon]

Very emotional, touching and as always well written. Beautifully done Rubie. ~Sharon

[rubie]

Thank you, Sharon, and my sincerest apologies for the delay in my response. I have been dealing with some personal issues that have kept for off the grid for several weeks.
As always, your comments and visits are much appreciated.

[Samuel Dickens]

I often have trouble coming up with good titles, but you sure nailed this one. The word, "drowning" is exactly what I thought after reading it. Whether drowning metaphorically or for real, we're often obliged to risk it all to save someone close. Hold on, or save yourself--that is the question.

[rubie]

Thank you for your kind words, Samuel.
Likewise, you nailed the essence of this piece. We would do anything to save someone we love deeply, but does that mean we love them more than we love ourselves? Which begs the question, who would save us if we do?
Appreciate the visit.

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Love is an action but when only one is acting to save it they both drown in a sea of despair. Very true and beautifully expressed, dear poet

[rubie]

Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving such a kind review.
Much appreciated, lynn

[Kelly Scheppers]

There is a time in every life that this poem applies itself to, at least it is so for me.

Your closing line took my breath away, and had me wishing I could have been one of your students! I bet your philosophical intuition made you one extraordinary teacher!

[rubie]

What a lovely compliment, Kelly.
Thank you so much for your kind review. It is much appreciated.

[Adam Adams]

So, you've got "green eyes". . . Good to know. I kinda love green eyes. Seemed, the whole nature & the shimmery castles -- the shine of granite -- have been residing in such green-ish world. Anyway, very deep poetry you've pen'd up. Seemed, the realism of love has emerged into the cascades of your "Drowning" words, nicely. I believe, love's itself an ocean where whether you swim or go sunk deep inside its layers, waters -- the ocean -- just takes you either ahead or deep down into the fathom of its voids/depths, for no reason. Very creative & philosophical write you've come up with. Seemed, you played with some kinda analogies of your "real" love-life & well captured those moments in words, creatively. Nice imagery.

[rubie]

Yes, you are spot-on with my ocean imagery and inspiration from my real-life adventures. You are so right about "sinking or swimming" when you are awash in love's ocean.
Thank you for you kind review.

[Adam Adams]

You're welcome, Rub.
Well, am glad you adore my words. I guess, it's your poetry that got me so stunned. Kinda breathtaking. Actually, now-a-days, such "love-oceans" are found everywhere, & of course, everyone's being drown as well, but only a few better knows the "value" of such oceans and those who knows .. always shape 'em with words or transform their inner feelings of love-world in words. Thus, needless to say, very poetic you're. Keep it up!

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darn those haunting thoughts that leave us trying the breach the surface of our sanity...sometimes all we can do is let it go and save what's left of our hearts...as Jacob said, this is heavy but so well written

[rubie]

thank you for your kind words.
yes, those haunting thoughts hang very tough.
and sometimes it's so very tough to let go, even though we know we must do so in order to salvage what's left of our hearts

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i couldn't agree more, my friend...you're welcome, as always :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

damn this is heavy---and really powerful in its wording....yes, if we exert so much of ourselves to catch another, who will catch us?

[rubie]

thank you for you kind words. always appreciated, my friend